The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper in Masontown:
“If we want to save money on municipal garbage disposal fees, we need to encourage our residents to recycle more. Late last year, our neighboring town, Hayesworth, passed a law requiring that all households recycle paper and glass, or pay a fine. Since that time, Hayesworth has seen its garbage disposal costs significantly decrease. If we implemented an advertising campaign encouraging our residents to recycle, Masontown would also save money on disposal of its waste.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of the argument assumes that his town residents would be encouraged to save money on municipal garbage disposal and ready to recycle more with the help of an advertising campaign. Moreover, to support his argument he also provides the evidence of the neighboring town, Hayesworth stating that had a decrese in garbage disposal by passing a law. However, the author's arument have many missing pieces of evidence and lack of in-depth anlaysis that have led to holes in the reasoning of his argument.
Firstly, to save money on municipal garbage disposal, the author provides evidence of the neighbouring town, Hayesworth, saying that last year they passed a law because of which they has seen its garbage disposal cost to decrease significantly. The author assumes that people of his town will also be ready to recycle the waste rather than paying a fine. The author should have provided some pieces of evidence on the basis of which he can say that similar to Hayesworth, even residents of his town will be ready to recycle waste and thereby reduce the garbage disposal fees of the town.
Secondly, it might be that Hayesworth have less number of residents than Masontown. It could be even possible that hayesworht town residents are more economical and educated enough to understand that they should recycle instead of pay fine. It could be possible that the Masontown residents have opposite thoughts as that of Hayesworth town. So, without proper facts and pieces of evidence, the author cannot assume that looking at Hayesworth even Masontown residents would be encouraged to recycle waste and save money on municipal disposal.
Thirdly, Will the advertising campaign have a positive result? It could be possible that the people won't be even interested to attend or view the advertising campaign. If the advertising campaign would not have the desired result then it instead of saving money, the money would be spent on advertising campaign with no positive results. The author should provide some evidence on which he/she can state that the advertising campaign would have a positive result.
In conclusion, in order to support his conclusion, the author hould have provided more evidence. With the lack of profound analysis and supporting evidence as well as logic and comprehensive reasoning, the argument stands weak.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 1922 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.018 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.613 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.707 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.651 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...they passed a law because of which they has seen its garbage disposal cost to decre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16797900262 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68291287729 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425196850394 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4095078755 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0625 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8125 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.70786347227 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207909531191 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837600998746 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781954220408 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126711839191 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087563205522 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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