The following appeared in a memo form a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
“During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industry plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or stated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of Quiot Manufacturing believes that by shortening work shifts, employees will get more sleep and become more self-aware, thereby reducing the number of on-the-job accident and ultimately increase in productivity. While the correlation stated seem logical, this proposal is filled with baseless assumptions which should be addressed before any change should take place.
First of all, it is assumed that shortening the shift times to match the hours of Panoply Industry will decrease the chances of on-the-job accidents. This may be plausible if indeed the types of work or working conditions for employees of Quiot Manufacturing perform are analogous to the types of conditions in Panoply Industry. We are not given this information however, employees of Panoply Industry may have a job with almost no risk involved such as simply sticking company labels onto products, while employees of Quiot Manufacturing have more dangerous jobs involving use of acidic chemicals. Also, the working environment of Panoply Industry may be harmonious with sufficient lighting, air-con, background music which allows employees to work in a careful while relaxed manner, while workers of Quiot Manufacturing have to endure the heat from no air-conditioning.
Furthermore, the claim is that by shortening each shift by an hour, the employees will have extra time to get adequate. There is no evidence that the employees are lacking in sleep however, with adequate sleep itself being a subject term which may differ from people to people. Some may feel the need to sleep for 14hrs a day while one may be suffice with just 5hrs of sleep. A survey can be conducted to see how employees allocate their leisure time outside work, and whether they feel sleep deprived or not. If the employees don’t feel sleep deprived, they are more likely to use this extra time off work on other matters such as clubbing which will make them even more tired for the next shift.
Lastly, the credibility of the claim that there is indeed more on-the-job accidents at Quiot Manufacturing itself is lacking. We are not given how long each shift is, the extra 30% of accidents may be simply a result of extra work hours, not being correlating with fatigue or sleep deprivation. For example, if each shift lasts 2 hours in Panoply Industry while 3 hours for Quiot Manufacturing, it is logical that more on-the-job accidents are likely to occur in Quiot Manufacturing simply as a result of longer work times.
In conclusion, while it is true that decreasing on-the-job accidents will lead to an increase in productivity, the vice president’s input on simply reducing shift hours is weak built on unfounded assumptions. These assumptions will have to be addressed before any further step should taken place.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2286 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.024 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.765 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.937 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'feels'.
Suggestion: feels
... differ from people to people. Some may feel the need to sleep for 14hrs a day while...
^^^^
Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have taken' or 'take'?
Suggestion: have taken; take
...ddressed before any further step should taken place.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2346.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16740088106 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88257918282 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471365638767 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.1587198456 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.625 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.375 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238443841885 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09438962127 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804375005632 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153550789105 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771513551076 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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