The argument conclusion “We therefore recommend that you choose southeastern Grilldon as the site for your next HobCo Hobby Shop.” rests weakly on three assumptions. First, the author refers to a poll research that has shown the interest rate of residents for having a hobby shop in southeastern, however, it is not exactly determined by the author where or who from the survey had ran. Second, a premise is declaring that the hobby business has tripled during the past decade in Grilldon, nonetheless, there is no mention of the business environment in southeastern. Finally, the author of argument putting the powers of concentration on retired population of Grilldon in holistic view. Likewise, the conclusion is about commencing a shop in southeastern of Grilldon.
The author is referring us to a plebiscite and displaying a rate of 88% acquiescence. The most considerable questions here are, who and which denizens had chosen to be in counteraction of the research. Furthermore, where was it exactly? Concluding the need of southeastern for a hobby shop with that errant precedence is definitely could lead to a fallacious decision-making. For the reason, the attendants of the research could live in another part of the city and give opinions about southeastern. With considering that issue, the result of the research might had been adduced by the part of community that possess more leisure time to be inclined more to hobbies.
Similarly, the argument conclusion depends on the assumption that the hobby business has flourished during past ten years in Grilldon city with regardless to providing any information about the southeastern part of this increment. Thus, we were not informed vividly. Perhaps the mentioned part of the city containing no effects of that accretion, vice-versa, it might comprise a huge effect on the results. Hence, those lack of enough information in the assumption of business increase is absolutely not reliable for any decision making.
The other assumption made by the author to arrive at the conclusion is the wrong perception of retired population in southeastern area by illustrating the ample retirees of all the city. Having a holistic point of view and interacting that in details have not presumed always right. For example, it is like asking about the amount of free time in old’s people house or in the business center of the city. Certainly, there are not same outcomes. Old generation prefer to spend more time on hobbies, that is truly right but assuming the density of retired community same in all around the city is not a radical line of reason for starting a shop in special location of the city.
In sum, this argument relies heavily on its assumptions, perhaps too heavily. Denying any one of these assumptions results in a weakened or, in some cases, invalid conclusions. Nevertheless, Concerning the lack of enough and reliable premises for ratiocinating the outcome of the argument. To strengthen the argument, the conclusion could be true if the author had mentioned the exact location and acute extent of the research with specifying that what is the perception of retired population in the southeastern of Grilldon. Moreover, the author must have determined the partial of each side of the city in tripled increment.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- better way: '88 percent of those who responded indicated that they would welcome the opening of a hobby shop in southeastern Grilldon', but it doesn't mean they will be hobby customers.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. 'ample time to devote to hobbies' is not equal to 'really devote to hobbies'.
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flaws:
the introduction and conclusion are too long.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 535 350
No. of Characters: 2687 1500
No. of Different Words: 247 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.809 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.022 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.935 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 195 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 121 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 76 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.1 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.276 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.477 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 393, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'run'.
Suggestion: run
...author where or who from the survey had ran. Second, a premise is declaring that th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, likewise, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 92.0 55.5748502994 166% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2778.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 535.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19252336449 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04855515478 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 204.123752495 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482242990654 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 866.7 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7043575895 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.12 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15860032689 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419060150846 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457054218392 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0888150439705 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542618200723 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 98.500998004 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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