The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. Due to this demand and the overall increase in clothing prices, we can predict that Sartorian's alpaca overcoats will be more profitable than ever before."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
Since, argument posit that resume production of it's imminent brand alpace coat will grow company profit. It is not only riddle with fallacy, but also with ambiguous. MOreover, teeming with untenable assumption and wanting testony. like wise, public outcry for alpace coat deosn't gives the cousterm interest to buy caot and adding new costumer, old fabric and new fabric are not juxtapose about quality of wool, what about overall cost to produce the coat before and after?, how longer the supply of wool last is pretty much vague.
Furthmore, quality of wool previously used is not compared with new one, which eventully cardinal to the quality of coat. since, quality of new supply wool fabric is not inspect and uncanny, which would deterimental to brand popularity. Insted, vice president should form a contingent of deft people and assigne them to evaluted the quality fo fabric camparison to previous one, which boon to maintain the quality and standard of coat manufacture.
Likewise, coustomer ourcry doesn't reflect the acutual number coustomer intrest to by the product. simply, relying would be upheal to company profit. However, proper survey should be done about intrest and linkling about product since product is comes after the break long period time, as people need interest change accourding to time. we get ample of information outcry customer are one only stringent customer or new customer colored by brand of our product. furthermore, supply chain of raw material should be moniter, how much and what knid of wool supplier provide for how much of time. Other wise, withut knowing it would be fatal problem.
Hence, argument is teeming with untenable assumption and effte testimony like about qaulity of wool, amount and time supplier not mention and vague, interest of coustomer change with time is not account for. After all , before implementing argument those assumption need to be exegesis aptly . Other wise, it would be deleterious mistake to comply vice presidnet reccomendation
, company not only suffer form financial problem, but also it will tranish brand value of product.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 15 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 29 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1718 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.053 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.409 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.034 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since, argument posit that resume production ...
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Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Like
...tenable assumption and wanting testony. like wise, public outcry for alpace coat deo...
^^^^
Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tumer, old fabric and new fabric are not juxtapose about quality of wool, what a...
^^
Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'juxtaposed'.
Suggestion: juxtaposed
...mer, old fabric and new fabric are not juxtapose about quality of wool, what about over...
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Line 1, column 395, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and new fabric are not juxtapose about quality of wool, what about overall cost...
^^
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...ntully cardinal to the quality of coat. since, quality of new supply wool fabric is n...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'inspected'.
Suggestion: inspected
...uality of new supply wool fabric is not inspect and uncanny, which would deterimental t...
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Line 6, column 28, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...cture. Likewise, coustomer ourcry doesnt reflect the acutual number coustomer in...
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Line 6, column 99, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Simply
...er coustomer intrest to by the product. simply, relying would be upheal to company pro...
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Line 6, column 337, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...eed interest change accourding to time. we get ample of information outcry custome...
^^
Line 6, column 462, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...stomer colored by brand of our product. furthermore, supply chain of raw material should be...
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Line 6, column 593, Rule ID: OTHER_WISE_OTHERWISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'otherwise'?
Suggestion: Otherwise
... supplier provide for how much of time. Other wise, withut knowing it would be fatal probl...
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Line 8, column 218, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... with time is not account for. After all , before implementing argument those assu...
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Line 8, column 250, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'those assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; those assumptions
...fter all , before implementing argument those assumption need to be exegesis aptly . Other wise,...
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Line 8, column 292, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ose assumption need to be exegesis aptly . Other wise, it would be deleterious mis...
^^
Line 8, column 295, Rule ID: OTHER_WISE_OTHERWISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'otherwise'?
Suggestion: Otherwise
... assumption need to be exegesis aptly . Other wise, it would be deleterious mistake to com...
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Line 8, column 379, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...to comply vice presidnet reccomendation , company not only suffer form financial ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, likewise, moreover, so, after all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 338.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2573964497 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4903352888 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547337278107 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.665508893 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0625 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181119673674 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555553688016 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428042661944 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957457943659 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401622903957 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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