The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Memo states that owner of the chain of cheese stores has come up with a decision to discontinue stocking variety of imported cheese. Since the domestic cheese from Wisconsin seems to be best selling as per survey provided in the World magazine. Also he/she has stated that last year the five years the best selling cheese where domestic cheese and so reducing the stocking up of imported cheese could help them increase the profit. The claim statement looks valid, because any enterprise would look forward to be lucrative. However it raises few questions in the decision made by the owner. Since the imported cheese is of people interest, if they reduce the stocking with the current level of data which has no bigger ground to judge, can also reduce their customers who buy imported cheese.
Firstly, as per the memo the five best selling cheese were domestic cheese in their stores and no imported cheese came in the top five. But the owner should also consider why the imported cheese where not selling, and how much they were profitable previously with the imports. Since they have been doing this for many years, if they suddenly discontinue to stock up the variety of imported cheese, this might affect business which in turns in their profit. Consequently, the result is not what the owner intended. Because the owner has to start analysing the profits over imported items in the past years, then he/she can come with a better position to judge.
Secondly, the World magazine which states that the best selling cheese were domestic cheese, which seems to be a suspicious statement in the memo. It raises a strong question "Why a WORLD magazine is giving preference to a particular domestic cheese with in their chain of stores". So the owner also has to look whether the data provided by the magazine is legitimate, also is there any discrepancies in the data. It is plausible to assume, magazine could have made the news to create sensation among people here and released a different set of news in different place. So owner has to verify the news before getting in to action.
Additionally, the most important entity in any enterprise are customers, so if they start discontinuing stocking up the imported cheese, people who buy the imported cheese might not prefer to buy in the store. So owner has to thoroughly go through the existing customer base of who buys what, how much imported cheese are getting sold, how many customers buy the cheese. All these necessary information has to be piled up to come with decision which leads to a profitable business and also valuable for the customers.
In conclusion, the decision made by the owner has to be reconsidered, since the decision is not having effective evidence to support it, also customers might get affected because of this decision. So the store should try to analyse all the possible scenarios and verify the existing data with them to come with the decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... survey provided in the World magazine. Also he/she has stated that last year the fi...
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Line 1, column 508, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to being'.
Suggestion: to being
...cause any enterprise would look forward to be lucrative. However it raises few questi...
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Line 1, column 525, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ise would look forward to be lucrative. However it raises few questions in the decision...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'as to', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220400728597 0.25644967241 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.194899817851 0.15541462614 125% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0655737704918 0.0836205057962 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0510018214936 0.0520304965353 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0273224043716 0.0272364105082 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.11839708561 0.125424944231 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0728597449909 0.0416121511921 175% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53104358885 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0418943533698 0.026700313972 157% => OK
Particles: 0.00728597449909 0.001811407834 402% => OK
Determiners: 0.11839708561 0.113004496875 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0182149362477 0.0255425247493 71% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0309653916211 0.0127820249294 242% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2948.0 2731.13054187 108% => OK
No of words: 501.0 446.07635468 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88423153693 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355289421158 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249500998004 0.287650121315 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.191616766467 0.208842608468 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0918163672655 0.135150697306 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53104358885 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411177644711 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.5238422795 52.1807786196 89% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 23.8571428571 23.2022227129 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8055244702 57.7814097925 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.380952381 141.986410481 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 23.2022227129 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 48.8072426575 51.9672348444 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.50666666667 1.8405768891 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.517350911412 0.441005458295 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127662910022 0.135418324435 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0753663159499 0.0829849096947 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.596897644758 0.58762219726 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.125626969752 0.147661913831 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237933895715 0.193483328276 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774666117217 0.0970749176394 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.520931876785 0.42659136922 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0921306148054 0.0774707102158 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.386905038744 0.312017818177 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821644335698 0.0698173142475 118% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 6.46551724138 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.82389162562 248% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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