Professional athletes should be required to undergo financial management courses when they first enter their respective professional leagues
Athletes who have transformed to be a professional usually doesn’t undergo proper educational process. For example, Sachin Tendulkar who is termed to be the best in cricket studied only upto class 10. On the other hand Messi, one of the richest players in the world also don’t have proper education. Because they sacrificed their whole life and showed passion towards their career more than education. Financial Management of these popular players are usually done by a financial assistant who helps them in consolidating their money handling and burning flow.
Even though they get assistance for themselves, the money they spend has been for a good purpose. Sachin Tendulkar recently presented four BMW cars to the Olympic winners and coach, this is for a good cause which inspires people to move forward in sports. Not only for them but also the youngsters, children and novice athletes who are from the very corner of rural areas. People criticised him for being lavish, but that doesn’t bother him. These incidence makes a good remarks about the players, who know that money becomes valuable, but money whatever they are earn should do welfare for the society or the profession they possess.
After the Olympics 2016, Usain Bolt’s three consecutive success was the sensational news all over the world. Meanwhile he gave the total money to a village to survive from famine. All these examples makes them more keen towards the society then having the capability to handle money properly. But sudden growth and over night success always lead few athletes to spend lavishly, were the importance of financial value comes into picture. Such people should undergo management process and proper education about finance. Since athletes train hard and focus on the events more, their focus towards handling money lessens. These issues are usually being solved by the assistance they get from their financial manager.
In conclusion, I would like to consolidate the fact, athletes should be given more importance in terms of the sports and their profession. So far the paragons of success has been doing welfare to the society after their successful growth. And people who succeed eventually might do the same, so financial management courses is not essential for a sportsperson, because being a normal social human being we have the ability to predict our financial abilities and capabilities to handle it properly, so such personnels are also no more than a human.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.245033112583 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.152317880795 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0949227373068 0.0880659088768 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0596026490066 0.0497285424764 120% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0529801324503 0.0444667217837 119% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0993377483444 0.12292977631 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0331125827815 0.0406280797675 82% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60781117036 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0264900662252 0.030933414821 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0927152317881 0.0997080785238 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0110375275938 0.0249443105267 44% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0154525386313 0.0148568991511 104% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2490.0 2732.02544248 91% => OK
No of words: 401.0 452.878318584 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.20947630923 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.381546134663 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.291770573566 0.280924506359 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.187032418953 0.200843997647 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.129675810474 0.132149295362 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60781117036 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 219.290929204 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551122194514 0.48968727796 113% => OK
Word variations: 63.2511813524 55.4138127331 114% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.05 23.380412469 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.411329882 59.4972553346 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5 141.124799967 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.05 23.380412469 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.45 0.674092028746 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 49.2270573566 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.425 1.64882698954 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170123677817 0.391690518653 43% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0690626610076 0.123202303941 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0325999875505 0.077325440228 42% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.462289583681 0.547984918172 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.115786931694 0.149214159877 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679623938874 0.161403998019 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507447622301 0.0892212321368 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.355811834464 0.385218514788 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.050770235571 0.0692045440612 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125883996521 0.275328986314 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406650684112 0.0653680567796 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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