The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of a large, highly diversified company. "Ten years ago our company had two new office buildings constructed as regional headquarters for two regions. The buildings were erected by different construction companies—Alpha and Zeta. Although the two buildings had identical floor plans, the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build. However, that building's expenses for maintenance last year were only half those of Alpha's. In addition, the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been lower than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction. Given these data, plus the fact that Zeta has a stable workforce with little employee turnover, we recommend using Zeta rather than Alpha for our new building project, even though Alpha's bid promises lower construction costs.
The construction of a commercial building should have all the facilities and amenities that the company requires. The perfection and types of work required to build such buildings are dependent on what the company wants and what type of work company does. Nowadays, there are a hell lot of construction companies which offer you so many features and offers that it becomes difficult to choose the right one. In this case, one should look at the companies are providing to you and what you really require and then the decision should be made.
As stated by the author, there are two companies which are taken into consideration. Moreover, he has given his suggestion from one of these companies. But, while suggesting he hasn't considered recent statistics and have given a suggestion based on his experience 10 years ago. In these 10 years, the other competitive company might have increased their value in the market and might have overcome the company suggested by the author. Moreover, the author says that the competitive company bids for low cost and offers less productivity. But again, this is the case 10 years back, it might have changed over the time.
The author says Zeta company costs more but provides productive output. The reason behind this can be a more expensive use of material, the number of workers to finish the work in less time, the area of locations, etc. The current project should take all the requirements into consideration and then decide which company satisfies theirs requires the most.
Secondly, the author says that Zeta company's building consumes less power as compared to Alpha company's building and so Zeta company should be preferred. But in reality, this should not be the case. The building built by Zeta company might have less work and lower power consumption appliances. Or even, it might be the case that the Zeta company's building has less number of appliances and also, the daily total working hours would be less. Thus, the author has not considered the reasons behind the things happening. This should not be done and all the aspects of work should be taken into consideration.
Thus, while deciding which construction company to choose, one should first properly note down all of their requirements and then approach different companies depending on their current market value and not from anyone's experiences.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- need to argue this:
Although the two buildings had identical floor plans, the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build. However, that building's expenses for maintenance last year were only half those of Alpha's.
argument 2 -- need to argue this:
In addition, the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been lower than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction.
argument 3 -- need to argue against the conclusion:
Given these data, plus the fact that Zeta has a stable workforce with little employee turnover, we recommend using Zeta rather than Alpha for our new building project, even though Alpha's bid promises lower construction costs.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 1931 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.913 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.571 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.684 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.245 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05357142857 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62685125415 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477040816327 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4620713108 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.05 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136050852365 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484605507535 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405858849252 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792189946883 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297215822502 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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