The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
It is stated in the memo that, 30 percent accidents have increased in the Quiot Manufacturing compare to Panoply Industry plant. To reduce accident they have decided to reduce each of three week shift by one hour on the bases of evidences that expert gave that, significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. However, before taking action on this memo some plausible question must be answer.
To begin with, Quiot Manufacturing works on what kind of project? Or what is the risk factor of the job in Quiot Manufacturing? Maybe, Quiot Manufacturing work on hard ware tools and Panoply Industry work of some other projects like food, medicine etc which don’t required any kind of heavy tools, in this case it plausible that number of accidents in Quiot Manufacturing is more than Panoply Industry. In Quiot Manufacturing risk factor is high as they are working on hardware which includes sharp tools and heavy machinery so it is blatant that their risk of accident in more as compare to Panoply Industry.
In addition, what is the job description of majority of workers working in Quiot Manufacturing compare to Panoply Industry? Maybe Job at the Quiot Manufacturing is more of a physical work as compare to Panoply Industry. In this case it is blatant that workers at Quiot Manufacturing will get tired more easily by both mentally and physically which may lead to debacle and cause accidents. If this happens to be true then conclusion drawn from the memo to shorten each of the three work shift by one hour does not hold water because workers may required more break and more advance machinery to burgeon the production of the company.
Finally, what is the status of equipment's used in Quiot Manufacturing as compare to Panoply Industry? Maybe equipment used in Quiot is outdated and damaged which required urgent maintains on the other hand equipment's used in the Panoply Industry are brand new and modern which makes workers work easy. If this is true than it is plausible that accident cases are more in Quiot compare to Panoply Industry. If this happens to be true than Quiot need to change their equipment's to make workers work easy and to burgeon the productivity of the Quiot or it will lead to debacle and it may also exacerbate.
In conclusion, the evidence provided in the memo to support his claim, are dubious as well as erroneous. If all above question are answer and more evidence are provided then it will strengthen the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 427 350
No. of Characters: 2056 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.546 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.815 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.37 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.397 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.609 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'shift' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'shifts'.
Suggestion: shifts
...ve decided to reduce each of three week shift by one hour on the bases of evidences t...
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Line 3, column 579, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ant that their risk of accident in more as compare to Panoply Industry. In addi...
^^
Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d modern which makes workers work easy. If this is true than it is plausible that ...
^^
Line 7, column 603, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to debacle and it may also exacerbate. In conclusion, the evidence provided in ...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d then it will strengthen the argument.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, then, well, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93896713615 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71452053706 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420187793427 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9785537139 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.764705882 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0588235294 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395105369272 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156277966408 0.0743258471296 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887864875994 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215686646245 0.128457276422 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973429881129 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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