The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technologies play very important role in human life. It galvanizes people to work more efficiently. Proliferation in technology is changing people’s life. I agree with the statement that ultimate goal of technology advancement should be increase people’s efficiency so they have more leisure time which they can use in other productive work.
To begin with, day by day technology is improving to make humans life easy and more comfortable. As technology is developing humans are also developing along with it. For instance, in olden days people use to write latter to deliver massages and it use to take lots of time but as the technology is improving humans made telephone which make work very easy you just need to dial some numbers and you get connected with a person you want to and pass massage orally which safes lots of time, than comes mobile phone more short and portable device and more efficient than telephone which can even safe your number so the person don’t have to remember the 10 digits number anymore on one click you can connect to anyone you want. This is one of the best example of technology advancement mankind have ever experience. But still in some bucolic side people use telephone instead of mobile phone.
Additionally, Increase in technology is saving lots and lots of time in olden days people use to travel from cows and buffalos but soon they realized that it is not feasible to travel long distance so car come in the picture which was capricious technology for many peoples. It changes the whole concept to traveling but again for car it was not feasible to travel on water as advancement in technology increases boat comes in the picture which make very easy to travel through water but again traveling throw car and boat it was not feasible to travel long distance like from one country to another country so aeroplane come in picture now traveling from one country to another becomes supper easy and comfortable and it saves lot of traveling time as in olden days people use to travel from boat which use to take several days but now traveling with aeroplane only takes few hour and people can invest remaining time in productive way.
Furthermore, Advancement in the field of technology brings more advancement in weapons which were use in wars which is big disadvantage or misuse of technology in my point of view. Swards, bow and arrow are being replaced with guns and tank which are far more deadly as compare to swards, bow and arrow. Increase in technology gives birth to nuclear bomb which hold ability to take down thousands and lack of people on war field in few seconds. Such advancement in technology leads to many wars and loose to human kind.
Thus, advancement in technology has made our life lot easier and comfortable compare to olden days and I agree with the statement that primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 238, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increased'?
Suggestion: increased
...oal of technology advancement should be increase people’s efficiency so they have more l...
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Line 2, column 98, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... humans life easy and more comfortable. As technology is developing humans are als...
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Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... it. For instance, in olden days people use to write latter to deliver massages and...
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Line 2, column 234, Rule ID: MASSAGE_MESSAGE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'messages'?
Suggestion: messages
...s people use to write latter to deliver massages and it use to take lots of time but as ...
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Message: Did you mean 'uses'?
Suggestion: uses
...write latter to deliver massages and it use to take lots of time but as the technol...
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Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...write latter to deliver massages and it use to take lots of time but as the technol...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...s and lots of time in olden days people use to travel from cows and buffalos but so...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... traveling time as in olden days people use to travel from boat which use to take s...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ys people use to travel from boat which use to take several days but now traveling ...
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Line 3, column 874, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hour seems to be countable; consider using: 'few hours'.
Suggestion: few hours
...now traveling with aeroplane only takes few hour and people can invest remaining time in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, so, still, thus, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2459.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85009861933 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61313012507 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431952662722 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.9 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 176.008167424 60.3974514979 291% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.6875 118.986275619 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6875 23.4991977007 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414562812379 0.243740707755 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147878391694 0.0831039109588 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132908095006 0.0758088955206 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28522326952 0.150359130593 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110354722634 0.0667264976115 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.