The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Board of director of Monarch Books recommend opening a café in its store to ameliorate sales. They support this recommendation by stating that opening the café will attract more customers. They also state that children’s book section should be abandon and instead of that café should be open. By doing so Monarch Books will attract more customer and it will compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café. However, before this recommendation can properly evaluate, some question must be answer.
Firstly, what if, opening the café attracts more noise and which may create unhealthy environment for reader? For example, people will start talking in café and even they may start meeting in café which will create noise. Main motive is to sale books and that’s the main reason Monarch Books have large customer base, If people don’t like the idea than they will stop coming to this book shop. If this happens to be true that, this may result into less customer and sales of Monarch Books may go down drastically.
Secondly, what if, sales go down if we abandon children book section? Tough children book section sales is low compare to other all sections still abandoning it and opening a new café on that place may not be good idea because sales of café is capricious. If we do so customer may not like it as this place is from past twenty years and still many of Monarch Books regular customer buy books for their children from children section. If this happens to be true, people will go to another book shop to buy the books which may result huge loss for Monarch Books.
Finally, don’t you think survey should be carried out between our regular customers before taking such a big step? As Monarch Books is here from last twenty years serving all type of customer so it should be obvious to ask customer what they want. If we open a café and customers don’t like the idea of café they will get disappointed and it may hamper our sales.
In conclusion, this idea is not seems to be feasible still if all above question is answered and survey is carried out, if it gets positive response from the customer than recommendation made by board of directors of Monarch Books shall be espouse.
Comments
e-rater score report
Need to argue : Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1776 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.554 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.278 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.342 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.882 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34716370682 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459948320413 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7992820817 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.764705882 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389627853142 0.218282227539 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153547448936 0.0743258471296 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107471703369 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239600668926 0.128457276422 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479090300316 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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