The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technology is not only boon but also bane for everyone at the same time. Now-a-days, technology keeps on changing (perhaps advancing) every single day. Yesterday’s ‘new’ technology has become ‘old’ today. The prompt states that the most imperative objective of the technology advancement should be to enhance the efficacy of people so that they can get more free time to complete other things. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement and suggest that the primary goal of all the achievements in the technology should increase leisure time of people for two main reasons.
First of all, the rise and advent of ‘Internet’ has made the lives of people very much easy. Not only people get more time to spend with their loved ones but also that time can be utilised to complete some other important works. For instance, online ticket booking of buses, trains, flights and so on has reduced the time which was used to go their respective stations and book the tickets. Furthermore, with the help of e-commerce companies like Amazon, Bestbuy and so on, people can buy anything, anytime and be present anywhere with the help of Internet and mobile phone. The above examples prove that so much of time can be saved or which in-turn increases the leisure time of people.
Secondly, technology advancements in smartphones have surged a lot of time for people. With the implementation of ‘Voice assistant’ and ‘Internet of things’ everything has become so easy and simple. For example, voice assistants like ‘Siri’ or ‘Google assistant’ are so advanced, that they produce almost 99 percent accurate results and there is no need to unlock your phone. By just saying ‘Hey Siri’ on Apple devices the Siri wakes up and any person can any question and it will answer with in seconds. Companies like Samsung has mastered the IoT. Many Samsung devices like televisions, refrigerators, washing machines, air conditioners are all connected with a app in the smartphone and they can be controlled with the help of a smartphone; like to swich on or off or maybe to do a specific task can be done and even monitored in the smartphone itself.
Of course, some argue that with so much of things or works can be completed or managed with the help of smartphone and by staying in our comfort, it makes people apathetic and physically weak. To avoid these problems, companies have implemented some features in which they will alert a person who is using phone for long time also some gadgets which will not turn off unless it is physically turned off. Therefore, even people need to understand that everything should be done in moderation and at their own cost.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 663, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...air conditioners are all connected with a app in the smartphone and they can be c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9578713969 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74350083289 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527716186253 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6847187217 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.684210526 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7368421053 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327166813257 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099455991123 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704055017996 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2074669466 0.150359130593 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673851779403 0.0667264976115 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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