The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The prompt suggests the idea to reduce the working shifts of the Quiot Manufacturing in order to upshot more productivity also with lesser amount of casualities. Although, smattering of logical reasoning have been provided by the author, there are many logical flaws in the premises underlie the argument. The conjectures are mentioned here in the below followed by necessary clarifications.
To begin with - the vice-president assumed that three shifts of work are actually causing the fatigue and sleep deprivation of the workers and thus resulting in more casualities than nearby Panoply Plants. This might be the case - according to the experts, however, might not be. The experts have said that fatigue and sleep deprivation are contributing factors for many on the job accidents but they did not take line that - "more than three hours of working shifts will cause fatigue or sleep deprivation". Or even if that is the case - the prompt has not provided any sufficient evidence of this. If the three hours of work shifts is actually causing the fatigue of the workers then the assumptions of the vice president is not faux. But what if it turned out the other case and later found out that most of the accidents are actually the result of capriciousness of the workers. So, it might not be a bad thing to question the idea of the vice-president to reduce the working shifts in order to reduce accidents and increase productivity.
Coming to the second one - the vice-president has compared the working hours of the Panoply Industries plant with those of the Quiot Mnaufacturing and has drawn an analogy to reduce the working hours of the shifts to lessen the on the job accidents. It might not be bad idea to deduce the conclusion from there, however, the vice-president is actually missing several pertinent points and factors related to this disparage, such as - the working capability of the workers, the surrounding environments, seriousness of the workers, providential facilities and mental conditions of the workers and so on. These are very very important factos to invlove in any influence of the on the job type of accidents. May be the workers of Panoply plants are much more efficient than those of the Quiot Manufacturing and as a result are doing the same amount of work or even more wihtin a less amount of time. May be the surrounding of the work palce is so comfitting for the workers that they can work on their jobs more closely and with great care compared to that of Quiot Manfacturing, where, in possible case - the workers do not get befitting palce for their jobs. Apart from these, the behavior of the higher official of the Panoply plants industries are so elegent that the workers are much more motivated to complete their sessions within time slots and thus conduce better outcome than Quiot. Similar cases might be arised if the speculation is done more closely, however in this case, the vice-president has gone superficially in deducing conclusion.
Also it is irony of the vice-president ot think that reduction of the working hours will conduct to bourgeois in productivity. Although it can be considered that lessening working hours will actually help to reduce the on the job accidents, it can be deduced similarly for the productivity. What if the workers are not motivated still after even reduction in their working hours? What if they take the advantage of this decision and try to exploit this for their comfort by doing less works and demanding more remission? These cases acan not be write off straughway as there is no sufficient regarding he psyche of the workers of the Quiot Mnaufacuring. If the workers are not about to do these kind of activites then there will be obvious rise in producitvity. But if it turned otherwise then it might take the industry into dogs!
So, looking at all the points and critical remakrs aforementioned, it might be too early to deduct any certain conclusion from the evidences presented in the promtps. In order to get more realistic and insightful views and remarks, the prompt needs to be reviewed with more related evidences and answers of the questions asked in the essay - and thus it will be safe to come to a certain conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 611, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ovided any sufficient evidence of this. If the three hours of work shifts is actua...
^^
Line 6, column 614, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: very
...ons of the workers and so on. These are very very important factos to invlove in any infl...
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Line 6, column 710, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...f the on the job type of accidents. May be the workers of Panoply plants are much ...
^^
Line 6, column 902, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... more wihtin a less amount of time. May be the surrounding of the work palce is so...
^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...uperficially in deducing conclusion. Also it is irony of the vice-president ot th...
^^^^
Line 8, column 43, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (ot) must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...so it is irony of the vice-president ot think that reduction of the working hours wil...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 481, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun works is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...exploit this for their comfort by doing less works and demanding more remission? The...
^^^^
Line 8, column 606, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'psyches'.
Suggestion: psyches
... as there is no sufficient regarding he psyche of the workers of the Quiot Mnaufacuri...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 656, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the workers of the Quiot Mnaufacuring. If the workers are not about to do these k...
^^
Line 8, column 691, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ing. If the workers are not about to do these kind of activites then there will be obvious...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, similarly, so, still, then, thus, apart from, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 11.1786427146 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 103.0 55.5748502994 185% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3523.0 2260.96107784 156% => OK
No of words: 714.0 441.139720559 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93417366947 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.16921448885 4.56307096286 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89101140013 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 204.123752495 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401960784314 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1103.4 705.55239521 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8125736669 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.92 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.56 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271831211425 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794414748626 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716567779397 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143662995666 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0808041082221 0.0628817314937 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 98.500998004 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 611, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ovided any sufficient evidence of this. If the three hours of work shifts is actua...
^^
Line 6, column 614, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: very
...ons of the workers and so on. These are very very important factos to invlove in any infl...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 710, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...f the on the job type of accidents. May be the workers of Panoply plants are much ...
^^
Line 6, column 902, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... more wihtin a less amount of time. May be the surrounding of the work palce is so...
^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...uperficially in deducing conclusion. Also it is irony of the vice-president ot th...
^^^^
Line 8, column 43, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (ot) must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...so it is irony of the vice-president ot think that reduction of the working hours wil...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 481, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun works is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...exploit this for their comfort by doing less works and demanding more remission? The...
^^^^
Line 8, column 606, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'psyches'.
Suggestion: psyches
... as there is no sufficient regarding he psyche of the workers of the Quiot Mnaufacuri...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 656, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the workers of the Quiot Mnaufacuring. If the workers are not about to do these k...
^^
Line 8, column 691, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ing. If the workers are not about to do these kind of activites then there will be obvious...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, similarly, so, still, then, thus, apart from, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 11.1786427146 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 103.0 55.5748502994 185% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3523.0 2260.96107784 156% => OK
No of words: 714.0 441.139720559 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93417366947 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.16921448885 4.56307096286 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89101140013 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 204.123752495 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401960784314 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1103.4 705.55239521 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8125736669 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.92 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.56 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271831211425 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794414748626 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716567779397 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143662995666 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0808041082221 0.0628817314937 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 98.500998004 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.