The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of Quiot manufacturing suggests reducing the working time for the laborers by 1 hour to ensure increased productivity and fewer on-the-job accidents. Moreover, the president compares the accident statistics with a nearby manufacturing firm, Panoply Industries plant, where the working hour is an hour less than the Quiot manufacturing firm. Additionally, the president provide the reasons for their laborers to cause fatigue and sleep deprivation; hence concluded reducing working hours. However, while the conclusion is drawn by the vice president of Quiot manufacturing, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically attenuate the persuasiveness of the argument. Therefore, mentioned points need to be taken into consideration.
Initially, while the president tries to juxtapose both the firm's accident rates, he adds that the Quoit manufacturing firm has increased working hours; however, he failed to provide any valid evidence which will base this statement. It might be possible that both the firms would require a different number of workforce and hence the probability of on-the-job accidents for the Quiot manufacturing is higher as compared to Panoply Industries. Maybe, Panoply industries have inculcated a higher number of machinery than Quiot manufacturing firm. Therefore, the more the number of laborers, the more the accident rate it.
Moreover, it might be possible that the work required to manufacture Quiot needs heavy physical skills as compared to Panoply industries. If the physical work required is greater then it's feasible to believe that more laborers are prone to fatigue. Additionally, if the break time provided in Quiot manufacturing is less, the workers would face the problem of sleep depravity. If the president has provided the readers with the aforementioned reasons, it would be compelling for the readers to believe its authenticity.
Last but not the least, it is possible that Quiot manufacturing firm is not competent enough to provide several facilities to their laborers that the other firm can. For instance, the Panoply industry might be facilitating their employees with several health benefits, proper medication kit, perfect tooling kit (so to work with increased efficacy), and salubrious food. However, on the other hand, Quiot manufacturing firm lacks these qualities due to pecunious finance.
A careful analysis depicts the loopholes present in the argument. The memo does not seem to be strong enough to buttress the conclusion of reducing the working hours at Quiot manufacturing firm because all the reasons provided by the vice president are skeptical. Therefore, the president must rethink and should provide a logical and foolproof solution.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2287 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.471 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.001 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 111 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.072 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'firms'' or 'firm's'?
Suggestion: firms'; firm's
...e president tries to juxtapose both the firms accident rates, he adds that the Quoit ...
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Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...s for the Quiot manufacturing is higher as compared to Panoply Industries. Maybe, ...
^^
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ills as compared to Panoply industries. If the physical work required is greater t...
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Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'greater than'?
Suggestion: greater than
...tries. If the physical work required is greater then its feasible to believe that more labor...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...f the physical work required is greater then its feasible to believe that more labor...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 418.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61961722488 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09411172904 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480861244019 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2036285766 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.631578947 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322121210235 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108174701847 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948474294125 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192844073866 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747590247269 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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