The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author suggests that Quinot Manufacturing should reduce work shift duration by 1 hour. He argues that this will reduce the number of on-the-job accidents and thereby increase productivity. The assumptions made by the author to reach this argument is rife with holes . Hence they do not make for a cogent argument. Lets consider the assumptions and the impact on the argument if they turn out to be unwarranted.
The author compares Quinot Manufacturing to another nearby company Panoply Manufacturing , that uses shorter work hours. He states that they reported 30 % more accidents than Panoply Industries plant which uses 1 hour shorter work shifts.Reducing shift duration will reduce number of accidents is the assumption. Arbitrary comparison can only lead to misleading assumption and numbers. The author has not presented any internal review of the root cause of the accidents at Quinot Manufacturing. Panoply may be a new factory with more mechanization. The work type in both industries maybe different. The volume , type and intensity of work done , the number of employees on the job that were involved in the accidents need to be elucidated. Without the above information the authors assumption that only because of longer work hours there are more accidents does not stand ground .
Again in the author assumes that shorter work hours will lead to adequate amounts of sleep in employees. Thus they will not be fatigued and not prone to causing accidents. Employees may have a longer travelling time and other commitments. It cannot be directly assumed that they will necessarily get adequate sleep. If the employees use that time to complete other tasks , again it will not reduce fatigue and not help at all with reducing accidents.
It is true that sleep deprivation and fatigue are the major causes of accidents in workplaces as stated by experts. The manufacturing company could offer longer breaks in between so that employees can take a quick nap if they feel fatigued.They could also avail transportation for the employees to reduce their fatigue . There could install better and new machines that make jobs easier . There could be several options to improve productivity besides reducing work hours. The authors assumptions based on nearby plant cannot be accepted without proper internal review . Another assumption is also is not well qualified. Hence we can conclude that reducing the duration of shifts is not going to reduce accidents or improve productivity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, hence, if, may, so, thus, well, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25879396985 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89169051574 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48743718593 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2294220689 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.72 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.92 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.28 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175748894808 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507786034096 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590059879713 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109872878176 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943661051516 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.