The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing."During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter

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The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.

"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

In this argument, the author states that the working hours should be shorten in order to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at quiot. To bolster this, the author cites the comparison between the data of accidents during work of the nearby panoply industry plant and that of the quiot’s. however, the statement is tenuous in several aspect.

The author mentions that, last year, quiot manufacturing had more accidents compared with that of the panoply industry plant. however, there is a hidden assumption that every factor that lead to the accidents during the past year will remain unchanged this year. it is possible that quiot manufacturing employed a lot of workers who are obsessed with alcohol, which made them unconscious during work and caused the accidents and they are already fired from work. it is also possible that this year, the working condition of quiot is improved and machines in use are more user-friendly, which will lead to less accidents.

The author also notes that there were 30 percent more on-job-accidents in quiot than in panoply. however, it is possible that quiot and panoply are already the industries with the lowest occurrence of accidents compare with other industries in the country. Thus, the adjustment for working hours will be hardly effective in reducing the on-job-accidents even more. Furthermore, the author unfairly assumes that those two industry plants are comparable. it is possible that workers of panoply are offered with superb housing and lots of health care benefits which contribute to the low accidents rate.

it is recommend by the author to shorten each of the three work shifts by one hour. Nevertheless, the author is making an over-positive assumption that shortened working hour will lead to higher productivity. it is possible that worker will use the extra free time to do something else such as playing video games instead of sleeping. it is also possible that less working hour will lead to lower wages. If wages are low, it is likely that workers will pay less attention during work which may lead to even lower productivity.

In sum, the author’s argument is logically flawed and the evidence used to support the statement are groundless. To strengthen it, the author should conduct a more comprehensive research about the relationship between the hours of work and the on-the-job accident rate, also consider the similarities and differences between quiot and panoply.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shortened'?
Suggestion: shortened
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Suggestion: However
...try plant and that of the quiot's. however, the statement is tenuous in several as...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'several aspects'.
Suggestion: several aspects
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...t year will remain unchanged this year. it is possible that quiot manufacturing em...
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...s and they are already fired from work. it is also possible that this year, the wo...
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Line 11, column 606, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun accidents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... more user-friendly, which will lead to less accidents. The author als...
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...laying video games instead of sleeping. it is also possible that less working hour...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, thus, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30653266332 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82946703282 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474874371859 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9240838763 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.157894737 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9473684211 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318547664641 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109519440832 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831629768336 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189649130822 0.128457276422 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783715794091 0.0628817314937 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 2006 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.04 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.719 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.311 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.679 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5