The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
it is being stated that the optimal way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation instead of competition. I strongly agree with the statement because, in my opinion, cooperation is able to widen one’">one’s knowledge, enhance one’">one’s ability to solve conflict.
Admittedly, competition can sometimes serve to stimulate people to work harder. In order to become a qualified leader in a myriad of fields, one must have a strong ambition to make progress and always set a specific goal to fight for. For example, if there is only one restaurant in the village, the manager of the company might not have any incentive to improve the foods being provided or the dinning environment since there are no other competitors. In the addition, the low energy of the leader will negative affect his employees to work inefficiently, which lead to a frustrated team and the restaurant business will eventually come to an end. In contrast, when there are competitions, the manager will notice his foods are how far lack behind other places’ and might be encouraged to make improvements to catch up with other restaurants. competition will always lead to comparison, and when there is a comparison, a goal will be created for one to strive for, which will prepare one for the leadership in his or her future career.
However, the number of benefits that associated with cooperation certainly outweigh the merits that competition can bring. First of all, cooperation is an effective way for one to strengthen one’">one’s ability to solve various problem. For a leader, flexibility in thinking is crucial because no one can predict what kind of situation he is going to face in the future; thus, one must be experienced enough and knowledgable to be able to come up with feasible solution for each issue. when a group of people work together, one can always learn about how others react when a problem occur and listen to others’ analysis about the situation, which serves as a great to widen one’">one’s thinking and broaden one’">one’s knowledge. Secondly, conflicts is inevitable in a team since each person thinks differently, and to be able to mitigate a contentious situation is also an essential ability that a leader should have. when a conflict occur during cooperation, one can learn about the most effective way to moderate the tension between the members and promote a better working environment. thus, when actually engage in a working place, a leader with prior knowledge about solving conflict will be able to lead the team back on track using short period of time whereas an inexperienced leader might ignore the problem and let it worsen.
In sum, there are many qualities that a leader should possess. By nurturing the young generation with a sense of cooperation, they will be more prepared for multifarious situations that they might encounter in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, whereas, for example, in contrast, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2601.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26518218623 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.56632595963 2.79657885939 128% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491902834008 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.8686051201 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 118.986275619 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0588235294 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 5.21951772744 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164201884202 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696066074427 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114708605999 0.0758088955206 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130267429386 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586851800815 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.