Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
In the statement, the speaker asserts that universities should require every student to take a wide range of courses outside their major field of study. In my opinion, even though some disadvantages in the aspect of increased academic stress, the benefits of taking various courses in myriad fields are invaluable compare with its negative effects.
when take a variety of courses in fields that students are not specialized in, first of all, the study time available for them to study their major courses will definitely be greatly reduced. it is undeniable that all universities courses have relatively gigantic workload, especially during exam period. thus, when students are coerced to take numbers of elective courses, their sleep time might be deprived in order to digest the substantial amount of knowledge learned, which probably become a threat to student’s health condition. In some more severe cases, the high pressure due to increased school workload might lead to depression. Only few years before, there was one student who successfully went into one of the top universities in China but unfortunately chose to end his young life in the dorm due to the unmanageable level of stress.
however, the advantages of taking various courses in different fields far outweighs its drawbacks. university should be a place where students are allow to explore different fields and find out what their true interest and life passion are. For example, someone might chose economics as her major in the freshman year. however, she found out that the genetics course that she took as her elective was truly compelling for her and she determined to pursue further knowledge in genetics instead of economics. thus, university’s decision to make elective courses compulsory is beneficial when students are still indecisive about their future career. In addition, it is a great way to promote communications between students and extend students’ social circle. some math students can have an opportunity to become friends with others from engineering department. students studying architecture are able to have discussion with students pursuing biology. These interdisciplinary interactions might ignite extraordinary ideas about how the knowledge from one can be utilize in other academic field. Nowadays, knowledges from sociology, psychology are necessary for politics to form their ideology; detective fiction writers might require backgrounds from history, anatomy to create eye-catching and detailed scenes in the book.
In sum, everything is a double-edged swore and universities should always carefully evaluate their decision towards their academic requirements. Nevertheless, there is an old saying goes, study until you are old. study is an endless road and study more will always widen one’s eyesight and university should provide the chance for students to explore more about our vast world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, for example, in addition, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2513.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 448.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.609375 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96706786393 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575892857143 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6709358858 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.65 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390263801339 0.243740707755 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114676550798 0.0831039109588 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118194608623 0.0758088955206 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249836218586 0.150359130593 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105217355625 0.0667264976115 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.8420337079 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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