We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the

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We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure

In the argument, the movie producer states that the movie studio should increase the funding for working Title to make sure it become a quality movie. To bolster this, the author cites that to work with inexperienced director and assistant producers will actually lead to more cost. however, the statement is tenuous in several aspect.

The movie producer mentions that the only experience that the director has is shooting advertisement for a shampoo company. even though, the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, we exclude the possibility that this director always shoots the commercials in an economic way. In addition, even if the director does shoot advertisement in a wasteful manner, the producer cannot unfairly assume that the director will shoot the movie in the same way as shooting a commercial. it is possible that this producer has read many books about how to efficiently use available resources to produce a qualify movie. it is also possible that he or she had take a significant number of tours to the movie shooting scene and learnt about movie production.

The producer also states that they need to pay extra money for actors and unionized crew to compensate the inefficiency caused by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors. however, the producer is unreasonably equating the word “inexperienced” and cannot work efficiently. it is possible that all of those assistant producers and directors are graduated from highly professional movie school, they might not have a quantifiable number of physical experience, but they clearly know the way to shoot a movie using as short period of time as possible. Thus, without clearly knowing the background of those employed assistants and director, the conclusion that shooting will continue for an extensive period of time is groundless.

it is recommended by the producer to increase the funding for the new movie by 10 percent. however, there is a hidden assumption that the producer will not use this money for private purposes. it is possible that the producer is lying about the proficiency of the director and the assistants that they employed. even though, the producer is presenting the fact, how can we know the quality of the movie will surely improve with this increase in funding? it is possible that hiring experienced director and other needed members will require an additional of 1000000 dollars. however, since the producer did not inform us what the base amount of the funding, an 10 percent increase might hardly be enough.

In sum, the producer is logically flawed and the evidences used are not strong enough to support the statement.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
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...nding for working Title to make sure it become a quality movie. To bolster this, the a...
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...ng advertisement for a shampoo company. even though, the advertising business is not...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an economic way" with adverb for "economic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... director always shoots the commercials in an economic way. In addition, even if the director does...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, thus, in addition, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2293.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33255813953 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96529502425 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481395348837 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.695275494 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.684210526 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6315789474 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273458432966 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957610016365 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815553635059 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148253976418 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775875499706 0.0628817314937 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2184 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.079 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.762 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.964 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.424 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.727 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.206 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5