Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy. At the same time, manufacturers are now marketing many home appliances, such as refrigerators and air conditioners, that are almost twice as energy efficient as those sold a decade ago. Also, new technologies for better home insulation and passive solar heating are readily available to reduce the energy needed for home heating. Therefore, the total demand for electricity in our area will not increase — and may decline slightly. Since our three electric generating plants in operation for the past twenty years have always met our needs, construction of new generating plants will not be necessary.
In this argument, the author asserts that the construction of new generating plants will not be necessary. To bolster this point of view, the author cites that the home owners have desire to be more energy conservative, and recent home appliances has become more energy efficient than those in the past, as well as that new technologies are available to reduce energy need. however, this argument is tenuous in various aspects.
By stating the result of the recent surveys pointing out home owners’ eager to conserve energy, the author unjustifiably assume that the total demand for energy will not increase. however, there is possibility that those owners will not physically take actions to save energy. Even those owners who took the survey are actually saving energy, we don’t know that if those owners are representative. it is possible that the survey only taken place in a small city of a country, which means that we have no idea about the rest of the home owner’s attitudes towards reducing energy usage. thus, the author should conduct a more deep and thorough research before making the conclusion that new power plant is not need.
In the assertion, the author equates the availability of more energy efficient appliances and new technologies with constant energy usage. however, this assumption is dubious. it is possible that those high-tech products are a lot more expensive than the standard ones, thus the majority of the owners are not willing to spend extra money to purchase them. it is also possible that when people are aware that those appliances are energy efficient, there will be a more frequent use, or a household will buy several of them. thus, we cannot be assured that the energy consumption is definitely going to decrease. before consider about the possible unaffordable prices of those advanced technology and a subsequent more extensive energy usage, the author’s suggestion is unsubstantiated.
The author also unfairly assume that the three electric generating plants in operation for the past twenty years will consistently meet our needs in the future. however, the author fails to account for the possibility that there will be a rise in number of residence or a skyrocketing number of industries, which means a possible increase in energy demand that old energy plants are no longer able to support. also, it is entirely possible that the three existing energy plants are less energy efficient than a new one, thus implementing a new plant may be a lot more beneficial compare with insisting on the old ones. Therefore, without ruling out the possibilities, the construction of new power plants should not be denied.
In sum, the author’s recommendation relies on certain doubtful assumptions that render it unconvincing. To strengthen it, the author should have a more careful consideration regarding to home owners’ energy usage, the effect of new technology on energy consumption, and the future energy needs.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 483 350
No. of Characters: 2418 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.688 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.006 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.738 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.717 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.453 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.694 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 375, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...es are available to reduce energy need. however, this argument is tenuous in various as...
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Line 11, column 186, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...al demand for energy will not increase. however, there is possibility that those owners...
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Line 11, column 409, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...hat if those owners are representative. it is possible that the survey only taken ...
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Line 11, column 601, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...ttitudes towards reducing energy usage. thus, the author should conduct a more deep ...
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Line 11, column 724, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
... conclusion that new power plant is not need. In the assertion, the a...
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Line 21, column 140, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: However
...echnologies with constant energy usage. however, this assumption is dubious. it is poss...
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Suggestion: It
...e. however, this assumption is dubious. it is possible that those high-tech produc...
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Suggestion: It
... to spend extra money to purchase them. it is also possible that when people are a...
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Suggestion: Thus
...r a household will buy several of them. thus, we cannot be assured that the energy c...
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Suggestion: Before
...mption is definitely going to decrease. before consider about the possible unaffordabl...
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Suggestion: However
...sistently meet our needs in the future. however, the author fails to account for the po...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...y plants are no longer able to support. also, it is entirely possible that the three...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as well as, as well as that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2558.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 482.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30705394191 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90368688585 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460580912863 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.880387227 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.9 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155745047682 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535738221576 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612449993133 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104582509427 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493775763818 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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