The author claims that XYZ company's lay off employees must be referred to Delany personnel firm as they would help in creating resumes and developing interview skills. The claim is bolstered by a few pieces of evidence which look convincing at a first glance. However, a crucial analysis is required to purport the argument as true.
First of all, the author claims that the employees have found jobs quickly when they selected Delany firm last year. What if majority of the people decided to go for higher studies? or moved to different place or country . The author is required to provide sufficient data statistics that states total amount of people who applied for jobs.
Secondly, the author claims that eight years ago when XYZ chose Walsh, only half of the employees found job within a year. There might be possibility that there could be only few companies which were hiring eight years back and now more companies could have got established during these eight years. The author must provide stronger evidences in order to proove this claim.
Finally, the author states that Delany is superior as it has bigger staff and more number of branch offices. Also, Delany's client took average of six months than compared to Walsh's client who took nine months. It might be possible that more staff members would be working as a part time employees and would not be productive in their work and Walsh firm with few employees would be hard working. Further, Delany firm would be present in areas where more companies are present and the job offerings would be high. Accordingly, Walsh firm could be present in the areas with less companies offering less number of jobs. The author must provide strong evidences regardng various dependent factors such as availability of companies, number of jobs offered and more.
In summary, the author must provide the above stated evidences to aver the argument as credible.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author must provide stronger evidences in order to proove this claim.
Error: proove Suggestion: prove
Sentence: The author must provide strong evidences regardng various dependent factors such as availability of companies, number of jobs offered and more.
Error: regardng Suggestion: regarding
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 321 350
No. of Characters: 1560 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.233 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.86 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.306 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.618 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
...eople decided to go for higher studies? or moved to different place or country . T...
^^
Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...? or moved to different place or country . The author is required to provide suffi...
^^
Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...panies could have got established during these eight years. The author must provi...
^^
Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ore staff members would be working as a part time employees and would not be productive i...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 573, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun companies is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...firm could be present in the areas with less companies offering less number of jobs....
^^^^
Line 9, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ences to aver the argument as credible.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, finally, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98442367601 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3537340633 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538940809969 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5261336729 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1176470588 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8823529412 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162448375327 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052874124368 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089257309181 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0971471314388 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868256257081 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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