The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.
"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors."
The author concludes that, student evalutions of professors should be terminated, as graduates are not getting better jobs. The author line of reasoning is due to student evalution process, professors are giving more marks to students, thus grades do not accurately reflect achievements of the students. thus, graduates are getting less job as compared to the nearby alpa university. The argument is unconvincing for several reason and seems flawed.
Firstly, The author fails to give any statistical data for the comparision of both the univerisites before and after implementing the student evalution procedure. this evidence could have made the argument more lucid tothe differences. Since, there are no such data we cannot conclude that securing better jobs has declined as compared to alpa university, it might be case that alpha university has always been a high reputed college and has no comparision to teh Omega university.
Secondly, author states that fifteen years back the rule was implemented, and there was rise of average of grades by 30 percentage. even if we consider this as correct, this could be the scenario for first year and this happening consistency every year sice last fifteen year seem highly doubtful. there might be many other cases because of which average grades would have raised . For example, may be after the student evaluation procedure, new good and better teachers were hired or may be after the new rule, the reputation of the unversity increased and good students started joining the unversity, etc. this author fails to provide associate other possibility of average mark increasing.
Lastly, the author claims that by terminating the student evalution of professor would help students to secure better job. but the relation is not clear, may be by removing the new rule, students average score might reduce but how will this help students to get better job. The corelation is dubious and flawed. The author should provide evidence to support his claim.
In sum, even though it might seem possible that because of "student evalutions of professor" procedure the average score of the university might have increased, but claim of students are not hired because of increase average score with respect to alpha university, seems flawed and author should provide more statistical data as evidence to support his argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1939 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.13 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.585 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.486 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.656 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 305, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...y reflect achievements of the students. thus, graduates are getting less job as comp...
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Line 1, column 418, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...rsity. The argument is unconvincing for several reason and seems flawed. Firstly, The ...
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Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...enting the student evalution procedure. this evidence could have made the argument m...
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Line 13, column 133, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
... of average of grades by 30 percentage. even if we consider this as correct, this co...
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Line 13, column 299, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...last fifteen year seem highly doubtful. there might be many other cases because of wh...
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Line 13, column 380, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...f which average grades would have raised . For example, may be after the student e...
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Line 13, column 668, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o provide associate other possibility of average mark increasing. Lastly,...
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Line 19, column 8, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...average mark increasing. Lastly, the author claims that by terminating th...
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Line 19, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...uld help students to secure better job. but the relation is not clear, may be by re...
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Line 29, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rsity might have increased, but claim of students are not hired because of increa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37037037037 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74807652546 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510582010582 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.815473025 57.8364921388 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.411764706 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2352941176 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112107795017 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0325175225119 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301006400291 0.0701772020484 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.06385720921 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02334846575 0.0628817314937 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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