Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author concludes that, the woven baskets are not endemic to prehistoric village of palea based on the recent discovery of such a basket, in the across river village lithos. he states that since the brim river was deep and broad, crossing river was not possible without boats. since no boat were found in the palea, the author concludes that baskets were not native to the palean. However there are several flaws in the argument.
Firstly, the author mention the about the distinctive pattern of the basket but fails to explain these pattern and compare it with the pattern of the basket found in lithos. For instance, he could have explained about the design, colour, size or any of such particular features of the basket. hence, the argument would have been d more convincing if the feature of the baskets were proven to be similar.
Secondly, the author claims that brim river is very deep and board. but author does not explain about river condition in the ancient time. it might be possible that river became broad and deep later in the time. if the river was shallow in ancient then it would have been possible for the palean’s to cross the river. hence, the argument would strengthen if the river condition in the past is specified.
Finally, the argument states that no sign of boats were discovered in palean, so it was not possible for the palean to cross the river. By this argument the author neglects the possibility of crossing the river by any other mode of transport like small basket boat or small log boats which would have enabled ancients to cross the river and banter the things. Therefore, the author should explain it further why other modes of transport were also not possible in order to make his clam more cogent.
In recapitulation, without the further explanation the argument made by the author looks faulty and less persuasive. In order to make the argument strong author should illustrate the details of the points made by him.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1586 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.665 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.245 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.03 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.433 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.732 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.195 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...et, in the across river village lithos. he states that since the brim river was de...
^^
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...g river was not possible without boats. since no boat were found in the palea, the a...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nce no boat were found in the palea, the author concludes that baskets were not n...
^^
Line 1, column 386, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... baskets were not native to the palean. However there are several flaws in the argument...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hence
...such particular features of the basket. hence, the argument would have been d more co...
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Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...that brim river is very deep and board. but author does not explain about river con...
^^^
Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ut river condition in the ancient time. it might be possible that river became bro...
^^
Line 9, column 213, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ecame broad and deep later in the time. if the river was shallow in ancient then i...
^^
Line 9, column 324, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hence
...r the palean's to cross the river. hence, the argument would strengthen if the r...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84411764706 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3674022526 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452941176471 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2613366945 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8823529412 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173787550607 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062000924338 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651383132248 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1052791425 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724884641748 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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