The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
young people are the image of our future, its very important to educate them in proper ways by which they should know, the difference between the wrong and right. While preparing them for tomorrow, we should be very conscious about the idealogy they are being getting natured in them. we want the young people to grow into leader of the tomorrow, may field it may be, then,we should instill the sence of cooperation in them rather than competion. there are several reasons i feel so.
To begin with, a person is considered as a good leader if, he does not just think about himself about also about the people/team whom he is representing. he should be able to understamd what people are going though and if they are happy or not. In addition to this, a good leader always work along the team to get the desired output. In order to get all these qualities in leaders, yound people of todays world have be feeling of cooperation cultivated in them. With the feeling of cooperation they can work with the team, understand the member of his team better as he gets to spead more time with them.
Secondly, based on a old saying, if you want to achieve something faster then, do it alone, but if you wanted to achieve something bigger then do it with the team. this is statement rightly, states that in order to achieve bigger team or working in group is significant. With team one can only suceed if it has good leader and to be good leader individuals should be cooperative rather then being competative. being competative you will be along, mostly people do not like working in group with competative people. so cannot really be a good leader if you are competative. For example, Nayan murthy, co founder of infosys, initially infosys was his dream and he could have acheived it by hook or crook but, there is no surity if infosys would have achieved the status as it has today. narayan murthy along with six friends co- founder infosys, as narayan murthy leader and they achieve the tittle of largest it company of Aisa.
In conclusion, some might believe that working with competative mentally might give you faster result, but working cooperative mind set will definitely give you persistent good results. so, we should give more importance to instilling cooperation rather than competition in young generation, so that they can florish into great leaders.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, as to, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 411.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80778588808 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51394133162 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513381995134 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.735946358 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.777777778 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104495557381 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367526541205 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484260007717 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0776372967073 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780587540585 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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