The recommendation provided cannot lead to the similar result which were achieved in Marston before the analysis and feasibility of the solution in different stores. As it may be true that by reducing the operating hours may not have affect in downtown but it might have a major impact on sales in town or other store locations. Furthermore, it is also required to analysis the interest of customer at different stores.
The main question which need a valid answer is whether the populace living near other stores are similar to the populace living near Marston. As it is said the store, Marston, is in downtime, the main high time for the store’s operation is before 6 pm but store in city may have high rush in the store between 6pm to 9pm as in cities most the customers are corporate people and buys after working hours. The nightlife of the store’s location may vary depending on the customers. The customer in Marston where able to adapt to the change in operating hours as time is not constrain for the people in Marston whereas in some other downtown stores people may not be able to go to store due to time constraint. If the answer to the question that the all stores have a rush time before 6 pm then reduction in operating expense may not be increase profit if the reason for the decline in profit is independent of the operating hours.
Another question which need a justified answer is that whether the interest of the people in all stores are alike, if not then the elimination of all movies released more than five years ago can not only help in increase of profit but may lead to decline in the profit for the stores. The customer of the store where the recommendation has been executed are more interested in the movies which are latest but it might be a possibility that the interest of the customer at other store may be more incline towards old movies. Nonetheless, a particular area might have more sales owing to a specific movie genes which have been released before 5 years. If this can be verified from the records that the sale of movies released in last 5 years is greater than earlier, it may be the case that the main reason for the decline profit is not dependent on the stock at all.
The recommendation has assumed that the reason for decline all 9 Movies Galore’s store is same as the one in Marston. Different stores can have different reason for the decline in profit. Operating hours and excessive store may not be a reason for decline in profit in other stores. There are many other factors needed to be considered. One integral factor is the quality of the product, may be the company to known for the great movies at cheap price but the quality of the movies is not satisfactory for the customer. Moreover, Quality is imperative then expense. Additionally, factor for decline in the profit is stock availability of a movies. Furthermore, location is an important factor. Nonetheless, the people are less interested in renting the movies than buying them. Moreover, the customers are more inclined towards the online rental where less equipment is required than cd or dvd of the movies.
The recommendation can considered to be achieve the predicated result if all these questions are answered and it may be answered if we analyses the last records of sales in the stores individually and also feedback from the people in the area where store is located as well as of the customer will help to achieve the goal.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
some arguments are lost. for example, we also need to argue:
1. Since we are famous for our special bargains, raising our rental prices is not a viable way to improve profits. //maybe we still can rise the rental price if competitors all rise the price
2. Last month our store in downtown Marston significantly decreased its operating expenses ..//look: it is only for one month; 2. 'decrease operating expenses' is not equal to 'rise profit'. still need to pay same rental fee for example.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 611 350
No. of Characters: 2800 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.972 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.583 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.532 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 199 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.706 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 582, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'constrained'.
Suggestion: constrained
...hange in operating hours as time is not constrain for the people in Marston whereas in so...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 644, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a movie' or simply 'movies'?
Suggestion: a movie; movies
... in the profit is stock availability of a movies. Furthermore, location is an important ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 136, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'analyse'
Suggestion: analyse
...e answered and it may be answered if we analyses the last records of sales in the stores...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, then, well, whereas, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.6327345309 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2867.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 611.0 441.139720559 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69230769231 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97176167858 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65035238587 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.353518821604 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 936.0 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.7996783067 57.8364921388 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.652173913 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5652173913 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95652173913 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117103040488 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044117469228 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033792577354 0.0701772020484 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0736190315208 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315263264696 0.0628817314937 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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