The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the assumption that time doesn’t play any role the research. Furthermore, it is also considered that the rearing and talking about parents is equivalent. Thus making the weak argument that Tertian village culture as well as the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid.
The argument is mainly invalid owing to the reason that it doesn’t considered the fact that Dr. Field’s research was carried out twenty years ago. As the time changes the tradition also changes in the villages. The children who were observed by Dr Field are now adults and hence maybe they were reared by the whole village but as the two decades have passed the parents are more protective towards the children and therefore tertian village culture is obsoleted. Dr Karp should have also interviewed the adults who were children at the time Dr Field study was executed. Though this would have given a much strong reason to extrapolate that the Tertain village culture was invalid yet this argument this fails to validate that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid.
The argument also fails to give strong evidence that the children of Tertain are not reared by the whole village. The argument that the talk more about their biological parents only give any strong proof that they are reared by their biological parents. May be the children are not good in communicating or maybe they are repeating the things that the children of the other islands are answering. This can also be considered that they are reared by the whole village but they have more affection towards their parents. As a result, we can say that besides interviewing the children, observing the children’s lifestyle is an integral aspect to validate that Tertain village culture is not practiced. Therefore concluding that interview based approach is better approach that observation centered is inaccurate.
As the argument has left many unanswered question as well as many factors has been ignored in the argument. Thus it fails to make convincing case that interview based approach is much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1844 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.108 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.795 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.235 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.2 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...earch was carried out twenty years ago. As the time changes the tradition also cha...
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Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...ed by Dr Field are now adults and hence may be they were reared by the whole village b...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...reared by their biological parents. May be the children are not good in communicat...
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Line 5, column 705, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...rtain village culture is not practiced. Therefore concluding that interview based approac...
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Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ctors has been ignored in the argument. Thus it fails to make convincing case that i...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, talking about, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.275 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95802815327 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4716024237 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.705882353 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191905879433 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061760818398 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594200899874 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101200397808 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705029482712 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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