The following memorandum appeared in vice president of health naturally. The author made strong assumption that from previous experience of store of health related product which in profitable, so we can should therefore build one of our new store in plainsville which is also made good profit. So there are certain assumption made by author without supportive evidences. Before this memo implemented, let us look in to given argument.
Firstly, Author assume that store was more profitable because of interest of residential in an health related activities. If Health food and health related product are available at very shortage so people may prefer this store. Author had not sufficient survey of residents, related to there working style, habits, about there physical fitness. so it might possible that people have more work load, having regular habit. so that they are physically fit them properly for this reason they may interested in healthy concerned lives.
Secondly, from the previous experience, people are also awake about health. so instead of using heath related product which are available at store they may prefer to exercise on daily basis, changing there habits, thoroughly life style change. Plainville merchant survey report sales of running shoes and exercise equipment are at all time high. whether survey have statistical data shown really graph increase from throughout the year. Is there any evidence shown people who buy a shoes are really going for walking purpose.
Author comment that local health club which nearly closed five year's have full business, and weight training and aerobics classes are always full. whether in that five year's there is limited local health club, or people have no other option to join different health club. Is this currently available health club have really maintain there records. Perhaps it's aesthetic look or infrastructure may attract people. There are several evidence required for detailed analysis.
Author have made strong point about student's of Plainville's who might join program called fitness for life. If school provide health club facility inside their own campus, having good exercise equipment, specific appointed staff, who regularly taken practice from student. Then is there possibility that student spend an extra money for local health club. Before considering an student participation in the program the author might have data about school who provide student an heath activity.
So, considering above all points, provided that before starting any new store, author look in all prospect. it's not necessarily assume that if previously store give profitable output, also the new store also give profit. So, argument become weak argument because of author unable to provide evidences.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2288 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.309 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.411 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.31 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
... made good profit. So there are certain assumption made by author without supportive evide...
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Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e because of interest of residential in an health related activities. If Health fo...
^^
Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
..., habits, about there physical fitness. so it might possible that people have more...
^^
Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...e more work load, having regular habit. so that they are physically fit them prope...
^^
Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ce, people are also awake about health. so instead of using heath related product ...
^^
Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...xercise equipment are at all time high. whether survey have statistical data shown real...
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Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...xercise equipment are at all time high. whether survey have statistical data shown real...
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Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a shoe' or simply 'shoes'?
Suggestion: a shoe; shoes
...there any evidence shown people who buy a shoes are really going for walking purpose. ...
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Line 7, column 148, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...g and aerobics classes are always full. whether in that five years there is limited loc...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 325, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'maintained'.
Suggestion: maintained
...ently available health club have really maintain there records. Perhaps its aesthetic lo...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 424, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: some evidence
...structure may attract people. There are several evidence required for detailed analysis. Auth...
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Line 9, column 319, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'extra money'.
Suggestion: extra money
...is there possibility that student spend an extra money for local health club. Before consideri...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 357, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d an extra money for local health club. Before considering an student participation in...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 376, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...r local health club. Before considering an student participation in the program th...
^^
Line 9, column 476, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e data about school who provide student an heath activity. So, considering abov...
^^
Line 11, column 109, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Its
...new store, author look in all prospect. its not necessarily assume that if previous...
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Line 11, column 109, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...new store, author look in all prospect. its not necessarily assume that if previous...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45011600928 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47387934756 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538283062645 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2276699282 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3461538462 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5769230769 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15384615385 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252336004921 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737898455066 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983605029763 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136973301898 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780164951704 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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