The following appeared in a memo from the director of a large group of hospitals.
"In a controlled laboratory study of liquid soaps, a concentrated solution of extra strength Ultra Clean hand soap produced 40 percent greater reduction in harmful bacteria than did the liquid hand soap currently used in our hospitals. During our recent test of regular strength Ultra Clean with doctors, nurses, and visitors at our hospital in work town, the hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection (a 20 percent reduction) than did any of the other hospital in our group. Therefore, to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply Ultra Clean at all hand washing stations, including those used by visitors, throughout our hospital system."
The following memo appeared from the director of a large group of hospitals. The author made strong conclusion that to prevent serious patient infection provide an Ultra Clean at all hand washing stations, including those used by visitors, throughout our hospital system. There are certain assumption made by author which may weaken the given argument. Before this memo to take implementation let us look in the given arguments.
Firstly, Author compare the between hand soap concentration. In an controlled laboratory study conduct for hand soap concentration, among this result found 40 percent of greater reduction in harmful bacterial. Whether author set an standard or its scientifically experiment shown as 40 percent reduction of harmful bacteria. If out of 100 Percentage of harmful bacteria only result give us 40 percentage successful output then again theory not up to the point. study to be conduct on how many people, or specific which people. In the sense of living perspective, if study conduct on people who are more conscious about their life, they may use continuous hand wash soap. They may be less affected by harmful bacteria.
secondly, author assume that because of implementing the Ultra Clean hand soap, there are significantly fewer cases of patient infection (a 20 percent reduction). Author not provided Test duration means period for which this significant change may happen rather it if of 1 year, 2 years. There is another possibility that peoples they may use to prefer hand sanitizer that individual carry instead of using hospital Hand wash soap.
Lastly author put an strong conclusion that to prevent serious infection, we should supply Ultra Clean at all hand washing station. Infection may happen due to various other factor. It's not whole reason infection may enter into human body by various way such thorough meal.
To sum with all, assumption to be made by author are provided with sufficient evidences then only arguments become strengthen.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1631 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.129 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.669 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.56 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
... our hospital system. There are certain assumption made by author which may weaken the giv...
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Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...or which may weaken the given argument. Before this memo to take implementation let us...
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Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...the between hand soap concentration. In an controlled laboratory study conduct for...
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Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...n harmful bacterial. Whether author set an standard or its scientifically experime...
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Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... percent reduction of harmful bacteria. If out of 100 Percentage of harmful bacter...
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Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Study
... then again theory not up to the point. study to be conduct on how many people, or sp...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...e less affected by harmful bacteria. secondly, author assume that because of implemen...
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Line 7, column 19, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...al Hand wash soap. Lastly author put an strong conclusion that to prevent serio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27044025157 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75783115665 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594339622642 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.280731164 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1111111111 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27530797563 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873541778211 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919807802696 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122825447114 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937996891447 0.0628817314937 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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