The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client.
"Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienced 90 days with below-average temperatures, and climate forecasters at Waymarsh University predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes have been built in this region during the past year. Because these developments will certainly result in an increased demand for heating oil, we recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following appeared in letter from firm providing investment advice to a clients.The author drawn conclusion on the basis of weather forecasters who predict that,The Increase in temperature increase demand for heating oil and recommend investment in consolidated industries whole major operation is retail sale of heating oil. There are several assumption made by author which needs an evidence for support assumption. Before this arguments to be succeed let's look into the given arguments.
Firstly, Author state those who are in living in northen eastern united states, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Whether oil is the only option for people instead they may use an different option. Even though they use oil as major fuel for heating,availability of oil in an certain ratio for fulfillment of needs of everyone.
Secondly, only on the analysis of twenty days, weather forecaster predicts next few years situation, which state that below average temperature will continue thorought the next few years. weather forecaster have evidence shows that certain changes occour
and so that forecast remain same remain for few year.It's an assumption, on the basis of twenty days, whether an change held permenantly or for just one year or an alternate year.
Thirdly, Author state that many new homes have been built in this region during the past year, so that predict that increase demand of heating oil.even though the new homes made, owener may left city and only rent basis he kept his house. so specific evidence required that whether peoples are really interested in the buying oil as major purpose. so that recommendation to made that one of whose major business is retail sale of home heating oil to be investment in consollated industries. Only on the basis of weather fore caster it may not leads to conclusion for an business to invest money for sale of home oil.
To sum up with all, author need to consider all the aspects before made conclusion. argument requires an evidence which may further strengthen arguments.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 345 350
No. of Characters: 1718 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.31 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.98 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.547 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.733 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.707 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a client' or simply 'clients'?
Suggestion: a client; clients
...rom firm providing investment advice to a clients.The author drawn conclusion on the basi...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...roviding investment advice to a clients.The author drawn conclusion on the basis of...
^^^
Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
... of weather forecasters who predict that,The Increase in temperature increase demand...
^^^^
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for heating oil and recommend investment in consolidated industries whole major o...
^^
Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...s retail sale of heating oil. There are several assumption made by author which needs an evidence ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
... sale of heating oil. There are several assumption made by author which needs an evidence ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 424, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eds an evidence for support assumption. Before this arguments to be succeed lets look ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 431, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...evidence for support assumption. Before this arguments to be succeed lets look into ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... option for people instead they may use an different option. Even though they use ...
^^
Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , availability
...h they use oil as major fuel for heating,availability of oil in an certain ratio for fulfillm...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...fuel for heating,availability of oil in an certain ratio for fulfillment of needs ...
^^
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...s, weather forecaster predicts next few years situation, which state that below avera...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Weather
... continue thorought the next few years. weather forecaster have evidence shows that cer...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 45, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: 'few years'.
Suggestion: few years
...so that forecast remain same remain for few year.Its an assumption, on the basis of twen...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 54, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Its
...orecast remain same remain for few year.Its an assumption, on the basis of twenty d...
^^^
Line 6, column 54, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...orecast remain same remain for few year.Its an assumption, on the basis of twenty d...
^^^
Line 6, column 110, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...n, on the basis of twenty days, whether an change held permenantly or for just one...
^^
Line 8, column 240, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... and only rent basis he kept his house. so specific evidence required that whether...
^^
Line 8, column 349, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ted in the buying oil as major purpose. so that recommendation to made that one of...
^^
Line 8, column 349, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ted in the buying oil as major purpose. so that recommendation to made that one of whos...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 568, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ster it may not leads to conclusion for an business to invest money for sale of ho...
^^
Line 10, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Argument
...all the aspects before made conclusion. argument requires an evidence which may further ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17302052786 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73141299582 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.3365577842 57.8364921388 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325392415551 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103830444708 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101160450875 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139937863995 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106819382808 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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