The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.
"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
While it may be true that The Mozart School should be the first choice for parents enrolling their child in music lessons. The argument does not make a cogent case. It is easy to understand why Mozart School should be the first choice for parents enrolling their child in music lessons. But, the argument is rife with holes and assumption, and thus, not strong enough to provide sufficient support to author's claim. I think there may be some hidden factors which may make author's claim to be invalid. Hence, the argument is incomplete.
First of all, the author assumes that Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age level. In addition, author states that there is no audition to attend the school. This is merely an assumption without solid ground as it does not demonstrate any correlation between author's assumption and author's conclusion. what is a correlation between author's assumption and author's conclusion? if the argument had provided evidence to support author's assumption, then it would have been a lot more convincing to the reader.
Further, the argument here assume that the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments and as well as wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. This is again a weak and unsupported argument. Since, it may possible that Mozart School is only famous for a particular dance style and majority of parents are interested to enroll their child only in one particular genres and styles that is not available in Mozart School. If the argument had provided evidence that school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments and as well as wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock is one of the vital reason for why Mozart School should be the first choice for parents enrolling their child in music lessons then it may make author's claim cogent.
Lastly, the author also assumes that the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Furthermore, the author also assumes that many Mozart graduates have gone on to becomes well known and highly paid professional musicians. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provide little credible support for the author's conclusion. For e.g., it may possible that the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area in only for particular period of time. In addition what is a correlation between Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians and author's conclusion. Mozart school welcomes youngsters at all ability and age level and author's conclusion? What types of styles and genres school offers? Without convincing answers to these questions the reader is left with the impression that the claim made by author are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
Thus, By considering the discussion above the reasons mentioned by author in argument are not strong enough to support his suggestion. Therefore, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 495 350
No. of Characters: 2495 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.717 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.04 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.647 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 203 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.522 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.302 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.783 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 322, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...hors assumption and authors conclusion. what is a correlation between authors assump...
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Line 7, column 395, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...hors assumption and authors conclusion? if the argument had provided evidence to s...
^^
Line 7, column 444, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...gument had provided evidence to support authors assumption, then it would have been a l...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 59, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... also assumes that the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the are...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 350, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...provide little credible support for the authors conclusion. For e.g., it may possible t...
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Line 19, column 422, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... may possible that the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the are...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 498, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ians in the area in only for particular period of time. In addition what is a correlation betw...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 517, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... only for particular period of time. In addition what is a correlation between Mozart gr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 25, column 42, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hus, By considering the discussion above the reasons mentioned by author in argum...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., first, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, in addition, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2562.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 494.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18623481781 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68661844476 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400809716599 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.697870135 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.48 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.76 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.24 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379651734791 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119830345208 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.173350753567 0.0701772020484 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209328478272 0.128457276422 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139287452406 0.0628817314937 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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