The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author concludes that an exective and consequently a business can be successful, if there are more people who sleep less than six hours a night. The author comes to this conclusion based on the findings of a recent study. The author assertion might be true, but following three explanations must be substantiated before evaluating the credibiltiy of the argument.
First of all, it is said that 300 people were studied in the research. This quantity of people may not represent the overall people of the world. Also, these groups of people may mostly contain successful executives who have a habit of sleeping less at night. If another set of people are studied, then there may be antithetical outcome. If any of these scenarios have merit, then the conclusion of the argument is considerably flawed.
Secondly, the study may not be scientific and systemtic. It does not give any detail about weather the executives sleep at day time to compensate for their night sleep. Further, the study is based on the sayings of the executives. They may not have said precisely or they may be flamboyance and have lied about the time of sleep to show superiority. If any of these cases are true, then the argument does not hold water.
Finally, the author assumes that night time sleep is only a factor determining the success of an executive. There may be other factor that determines the achievement. Strong propensity toward work, toil and dilligent virtues may be the factors for giving the desired result by the executives rather than their duration of sleep. Also, these employees who had higher profit margins and faster growth may be consummate and are caveat towards their work. If any of these are the actual cases, then the persuasiveness of the argument is hindered.
Thus, in conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is significantly flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide evidences to these three explanations (perhaps by a systematic study approach), then the viability of the argument can fully be determined.
Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: The author concludes that an exective and consequently a business can be successful, if there are more people who sleep less than six hours a night.
Description: The fragment who sleep less is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace sleep with verb, past tense
Sentence: The author concludes that an exective and consequently a business can be successful, if there are more people who sleep less than six hours a night.
Error: exective Suggestion: executive
Sentence: The author assertion might be true, but following three explanations must be substantiated before evaluating the credibiltiy of the argument.
Error: credibiltiy Suggestion: credibility
Sentence: This quantity of people may not represent the overall people of the world.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Also, these groups of people may mostly contain successful executives who have a habit of sleeping less at night.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If another set of people are studied, then there may be antithetical outcome.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Secondly, the study may not be scientific and systemtic.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: systemtic Suggestion: systematic
Sentence: They may not have said precisely or they may be flamboyance and have lied about the time of sleep to show superiority.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: flamboyance Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: There may be other factor that determines the achievement.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Strong propensity toward work, toil and dilligent virtues may be the factors for giving the desired result by the executives rather than their duration of sleep.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: dilligent Suggestion: diligent
Sentence: Also, these employees who had higher profit margins and faster growth may be consummate and are caveat towards their work.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Thus, in conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is significantly flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions.
Error: unwarranted Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
Double check spelling errors.
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Minimum four paragraphs wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 347 350
No. of Characters: 1679 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.316 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.839 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.733 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.322 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.85 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.313 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ased on the findings of a recent study. The author assertion might be true, but fol...
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Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'lain'.
Suggestion: lain
...ely or they may be flamboyance and have lied about the time of sleep to show superio...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97694524496 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82080898856 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510086455331 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0170545462 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.35 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.35 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144706945486 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459270313386 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531285062066 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834814861024 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448243158713 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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