Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In the present context, formal education has been a vital process of a person right after birth. He is admitted to play group, school, college, and university. The prompt describes this process of education as restriction to mind and spirit. However, I mostly disagree with the prompt and provide two reasons about how formal education is beneficial. Although, I concede a few cases where prompt holds true.
Firstly, humans are learning creatures. They get knowledge from past experiences, surrounding and by different formal methods. Formal education in specific gives us straight knowledge of different aspects. There will be large difference between thinking of a formally educated and uneducated person. For instance, if two persons are interviewed with on being formally educated and the other not having formal education with similar dresses and given a similar question; the question not being the field of the formally educated person, certainly, the answer of the educated person will be more understandable as well as board in thought. Formal education thus widens the thinking of an individual.
Moreover, studying is not only means getting knowledge of what is being written in the book but also a process where the person must have a patience of sequentially going through words and focusing his mind in it completely. It increases the patience and concentration of the reader. For example, two persons both receiving formal education but one having higher level of education than the other if given an article to read, the person with higher level education reads it faster and understands it better in a short time. This is because the person has previous knowledge of the article but by the level of focus and the attention, he provides on reading.
However, formal education must coincide with the interest of the individual. A universal uniformity of curriculum to every student is a curse. A person who wants to be an astrologer when given education about biology of plants will certainly hinder his progression in the field he wants to pursue and also slowly loses his interest in education. It surely hinders his development and also decreases his spirit of learning.
In conclusion, formal education does not have a negative impact who acquires it despite some process that must be changed according to the need of the reader that helps in overall development of mind and soul of the person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...out how formal education is beneficial. Although, I concede a few cases where prompt hol...
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Line 2, column 64, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...ning creatures. They get knowledge from past experiences, surrounding and by different formal me...
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Line 2, column 588, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he answer of the educated person will be more understandable as well as board in ...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'patience'.
Suggestion: patience
...so a process where the person must have a patience of sequentially going through words and...
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Line 3, column 500, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...tion reads it faster and understands it better in a short time. This is because the pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15482233503 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78474515644 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 78.858354028 60.3974514979 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.55 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137218253907 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458419649959 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407085701138 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835509904053 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235857975749 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.8971910112 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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