The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep th

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The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.

"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
An article in business magazine says that, only those people should be hire who sleep 6 hour or less than that according to study of advertising firm because they believe that profit margin of such people is more. This conclusion is drawn out from studying 300 male and female according to their average number of hours they sleep per night and success of their firm. However, before this recommendation can properly evaluate some question must be answer.
To began with, article is saying that person who sleep less than or at the most 6 hours have success in their firms is it so? If we consider this as true than what about all those successful firms whose employee take good amount of sleep and still they are on top. Sleep depends on person to person but at a average 7 to 8 hours of sleep is more than sufficient to work productively. For instance, if any firm is forcing their employee to sleep only for 6 hour for productive work than result may come out opposite of what was expected. Employee may get tired and feel depressed which will result in low efficiency at work. His/her progress graph may decent down because of this. If either of this scenario is true than firm will never become successful.
Secondly, what if study rating which was made on 300 men and female was less? What if we consider more men and women across the globe? than result of study may be differ. For example, if we do survey on large scale than this result may differ. Productivity of any employee will hit its peck only when his/her mind is stable and mind can only be stable when he/she have taken enough sleep. Less amount of sleep may lead to stress and anxiety and no one can work under such mental pressure. If person try to work in such condition than he/she may go in state of depression which is not at all good for health.
In conclusion, firm should hire only those who sleep for 6 hour or less if they want to progress seems to be travesty. Lack of evidence and loop holes makes this article useless. if more evidence is provided and all above question is answered than that article can taken under consideration.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Implications
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Line 2, column 73, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'hired'?
Suggestion: hired
... says that, only those people should be hire who sleep 6 hour or less than that acco...
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Message: Comparison is written "as true 'as'".
Suggestion: as
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: hours
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... graph may decent down because of this. If either of this scenario is true than fi...
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Suggestion: If
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58121827411 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36720950641 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484771573604 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5663281658 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9523809524 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7619047619 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204285883602 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612518927322 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790163852752 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118469487574 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107299275416 0.0628817314937 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.3799401198 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.3550499002 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.197005988 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.32208582834 83% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 1757 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.415 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.281 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.494 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.842 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.317 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5