The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The crux of the argument is that advertisement firms should hire executives who slept not more than six hours because the author claimed according to a recent study there is an association between the amount of sleep and the success of the firms. The argument is based on unwarranted reasons and flawed for the following reasons.
Primarily, the author claimed the conclusion on the basis of a survey on only 300 people. The author does not provide how many firms were involved in that survey. It might be possible that the study had been conducted on two company, and one company already was in loss not because of the executives and their amount of sleep, but because of the unpopularity of their product. Other company already making a profit because of their quality of the products. The author also believed that some employees within 300 people represent the whole community which is not pragmatic.
On the other hand, the author never divulges the number of executives who were unsuccessful because of their sleep patterns. WIthout the percentages and actual numbers of successful and unsuccessful employees, it is impossible to conclude that the firm's prosperity depends on the amount of sleep of marketing executives. The author ignorance about the other factors that played a vital role in the success of a company.
Another claimed the author presented was that advertisement firms hire people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night. It might have an adverse effect on the company and people could not complete their sleep in order to keep their jobs and that situation might harm the company. Another complication will be people got the jobs not on the basis of their qualification but on their sleep patterns. Also, the author does not provide the data or difference of margins of profits between companies those who hire people, who sleep less than 6 hours and those who do not.
The following argument based on unwarranted reasons and flawed. The author failed to offer any convincing data that proves the sleep patterns of executives and the profits a firm made was related to each other.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1729 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.843 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.547 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.285 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.312 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'firms'' or 'firm's'?
Suggestion: firms'; firm's
..., it is impossible to conclude that the firms prosperity depends on the amount of sle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 357.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93277310924 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60077660496 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453781512605 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8887030094 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0625 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17082902786 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565476018529 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616026295276 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107719308472 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668346918222 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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