A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The topic was about dental care and tooth decay in the United States greater than Himalayan children, even though United States suburban children gets more professional dental care. In the following argument the author made numerous unwarranted assumptions and the argument is flawed for the following reasons.
first, the author assumes that the food and living habits are the same in the United States and Himalayan mountains. It might be possible that Nepalese children living in austere life where junk food and water pollution is not severe comparing to the United States. It might be possible that daily living habit are the cause of dental health decays and that might be solved if we study more children food habits and their living habits. We might discover the root of the cause and abridge those foods and habits from their lives.
The author also claimed that the survey had been done between Nepal and suburban United States areas. The author does not provides any informations and data about what percent and actual number of children studied in that survey. It might be possible that a specific areas children in Nepal was studied or specific children were surveyed, where children were lead a healthy lifestyle, also it might be possible that the author surveyed specific children or area where social habits are not healthy. The author made that analogy depending upon that small number represents the whole.
The author also claimed that united states children see their dentists for dental care that Nepal. It might be possible that they had to see the dentists because of the bad conditions of their teeth, where Nepal does not need regular dental care as they lead healthy food habits. Also, it is unwarranted to assume that children in Nepal does not get professional dental care, as the author does not presents any data about Nepal's dental facilities.
at the end of the topic, because the author made several unwarranted assumptions and flawed arguments, fails to provide any convincing data about the claims he had made about the United States need more than regular dental care to prevent tooth decay.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- No
argument 3 -- No
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1749 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.941 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.23 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.246 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.424 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.653 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.195 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...t is flawed for the following reasons. first, the author assumes that the food and l...
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Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provide'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: provide
...nited States areas. The author does not provides any informations and data about what pe...
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Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...nited States areas. The author does not provides any informations and data about what pe...
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Line 4, column 399, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'present'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: present
...nal dental care, as the author does not presents any data about Nepals dental facilities...
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Line 4, column 399, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'present'
Suggestion: present
...nal dental care, as the author does not presents any data about Nepals dental facilities...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: At
...y data about Nepals dental facilities. at the end of the topic, because the autho...
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Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lar dental care to prevent tooth decay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03107344633 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27799419598 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418079096045 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6628348168 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.214285714 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.35714285714 5.70786347227 24% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219977069262 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876395620157 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606404549601 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128007094807 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408706313358 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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