The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
In the given Dean's newsletter, the author cotents that te universityof Wabash is goign to mandate all students to serve the community in order to graduate. The Dean enumearted several differet reasons to bolster the new policy. Firstly, the objective is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. Students are expected to gain opportunity to give back to the community and real-world working experince. So, the university of Wabash students are required to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. Although the argument sound plausible, coipious logical flaws are founded, and the new policy needs to be amended in order to achieve a more desirable comprehension.
Firstly, in terms of ultimate goal of any univeristy, it does not necessarily imply students from Wabash university are required to complete community services. The university should not indicate any other universities for this new policy. They need to decide on their own, and should restate the university of Wabash's objective. Stating soley the University of Wbash is going to introduce new policy because any other universities are going to share the same objective is not reliable. Even more, it is not going to be convice students the reason for unpaid community services.
Also, the newsletter phraised as "a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience." This sentence can be heinous and fragile to convey the right message to students. Many of students are not going to recognize and appreciate the reason why they need to give back because they did not earn anything unless they receive stipend or scholarship, which do not happen to everyone. If the university is looking forward to experience students with real-world working experience, the university needs to mandate internship related to a student's mjaor.
Regarding the period of community services, it is arguably long. At least 8 hours of unpaid community service for a total of 9 months is two semster and more periods. Again, students need to pay for their expensive tuitions and study deiligent for exmas and assignments. The side effects of requiring community service will engender deletrious impacts on students, and eventually to school itself. The university needs to conduct any type of surveys to ask students' ideas and their willingness. Deplyoing new rules without any consideration of students will going to cause incongrioused aruge.
Hence, the claim based on points which the author mentioned is not trustworthy. In order to deliver and introduce limpid and irrefutable policy, the university of Wabash should elucidate the claim better to abolish all inflammatory points.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 22 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2267 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.2 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.837 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.957 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.417 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.348 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.504 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 594, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
... needs to mandate internship related to a students mjaor. Regarding the period of commu...
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Line 7, column 559, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...hout any consideration of students will going to cause incongrioused aruge. Hence,...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, look, regarding, so, well, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2332.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34862385321 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.952054945 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493119266055 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0029383797 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343789283662 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101678406871 0.0743258471296 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063503983253 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188201773458 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771875859688 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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