The petitioner states that the Youngtown Wildlife Reserve land on which the Smith Corporation is planning to build a small hotel will adversely affect the survival of 300 bird species living in that area. He also states that doing so would also affect the community as a whole in a bad way which relies on tourism because of the bird population in the wildlife preserve.
The petitioner's states that the proposed construction will have disastrous consequences for their area but does not provide any consequences that might lead to problems for the community or the bird population.It is also not clear whether his idea of consequences is same as that of the community. It might be possible that the community thinks of this in a more positive light or has mixed feelings about the pros and cons of the project. His petition also lacks in any evidence that the small percentage of the land required will directly affect the bird population.
He believes that the project will bring no benefit to the community which relies on tourism. But construction of a new hotel can actually bring in more tourist to place in lieu of better of accommodation and better overall experience. He also dismisses the corporations promise without expounding any reasons for dismissing it.He assumes that all the circumstance will go against their community whereas it can boost their economies in a much a more positive way if the tourists experience of the hotel is a good one. With greater footfall their communities can bring in more cash by doing small businesses like selling handicrafts, photographs and other products indigenous to their community.
Whether the construction will benefit the community or go against it is not clear from the petitioner's arguments. His petition lacks in providing proof for all his reservations for the project.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1513 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.944 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.846 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.4 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ld also affect the community as a whole in a bad way which relies on tourism because of the ...
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Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'state'.
Suggestion: state
...e wildlife preserve. The petitioners states that the proposed construction will hav...
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Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ead to problems for the community or the bird population.It is also not clear whe...
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Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...r the community or the bird population.It is also not clear whether his idea of c...
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Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...xpounding any reasons for dismissing it.He assumes that all the circumstance will ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 304.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05592105263 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8933440878 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493421052632 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0698474527 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.727272727 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6363636364 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27272727273 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.062470513527 0.218282227539 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277255093914 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374818040752 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0439918033202 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396772143638 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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