The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve This sanctuary is essent

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The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:
"The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument states that the Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife since the sanctuary is essential to the survival of 300 bird species living that area. Although the company promises to ensure preservation of the sanctuary but the environmental protection group seem to not believe on the company's claim. Land encroachment is a major concern in modern times. Especially using forest and wildlife area for purposes of building other infrastructure that could aid tourism and economy. This unplanned expansion and urbanisation has led to a disastrous global environmental imbalance affecting the entire wildlife population. Many industrialist seem to promise that wildlife preservation would be the key agenda sounds plausible but false.

The article states only a small percentage of land would be sold to the Smith corporation but does not provide with what part of the land would be utilised by the corporation. Giving up of the santuary's land would cause displacement of thousands of birds and consequesntly disrupting the environmental balance. The expansion in the name of development and tourism has resulted into global warming and unsustainable growth. It is true that the proposed development will not only have a disastrous impact on the area, but would also disrupt the environmental cycle causing an ecological imbalance. With the rising global warming such activities have to be stopped for a better sustainable future.

The assumption that under no circumstances the sale would benefit the community, which relies on tourists who visit primarliy to see the magnificent bird population could be agreed upon to a certain context. Any bird santuary could be a great hotsopt for the tourists, attracting not just the local population, but the global as well. The building of the hotel in place of the bird sanctuary would be a boon to the local community in terms of attracting more and more tourist population. New hotel would also result into new opportunities for the local area people generating jobs and other services. Although the construction will result into displacement of a significant amount of bird population causing an ecological imbalance, but would create opportunities for the local population.

In conclusion, sustainable development and expansion is the key to such problems. The construction of new hotel which would create tourism for the local population and aid them by generating new opportunities, but at the same time an environmental disruption would harm the bird population and ultimately contributing to the global warming.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 691, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun industrialist seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many industrialists'.
Suggestion: Many industrialists
...fecting the entire wildlife population. Many industrialist seem to promise that wildlife preservat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, in conclusion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39130434783 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15482610027 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473429951691 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9186993341 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.77777777778 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22318859014 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713579392022 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868240217172 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142901159634 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121278146164 0.0628817314937 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2193 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.297 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.105 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.446 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5