The environmental protection group contents that Smith Corporation should not be allowed to build a hotel on the land that is now a part of Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. Its so because the proposed development will harm them 300 bird species that lie in this area.This will further impact the their community as it will impact the tourism which is primarily relying on the magnificent bird population.
Although, the argument seems coherent at first glance. However, upon scrutiny, on can fathom that its based on flawed assumptions and premises.
The most glaring fallacy in the petition is that it has not explained about the location of the hotel which shall be built. The location of the hotel is important as it helps to determine the impact of the construction. Maybe the land being provided to the Corporation is in the beginning of the Sanctuary where the birds are not sighted often. Hence, just because the development is being done on a land which is part of Wildlife preserve doesn't implies that it will have disastrous consequences for the bird population.
In addition, the petition has not given solid evidence to prove that the construction will harm the bird population. Its just based on the belief of the environmental protection group. Without any concrete evidence,the reliability of the premises becomes questionable.
Although,its true that construction can impact the wildlife/bird population inhabiting that area. However, usually when such construction occurs its highly regulated by the government.They ensure that the construction is not being done within certain range of the endemic wildlife etc. Hence as no evidence has been given to us that such regulations have been set or not. We cannot judge that the construction will harm the population.
Thus, due to the unavailability of reliable evidence regarding how the development of land will harm the bird population one cannot assume that this construction will have disastrous consequences on that community. The author must have given evidence regarding government regulation for evidence being violated, the location of the hotel wrt to bird population so that one could correctly determine whether the contruction will have negative imoact or not
Essay evaluation report
here goes a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-essays/following-appeared-part-petition…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1845 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.111 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.865 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.264 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.586 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the land that is now a part of Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. Its so because the pr...
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Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... 300 bird species that lie in this area.This will further impact the their community...
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Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...e in this area.This will further impact the their community as it will impact the tourism...
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Line 1, column 403, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing on the magnificent bird population. Although, the argument seems coherent at first g...
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Line 4, column 441, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...land which is part of Wildlife preserve doesnt implies that it will have disastrous co...
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Line 6, column 215, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ion group. Without any concrete evidence,the reliability of the premises becomes que...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f the premises becomes questionable. Although,its true that construction can impact t...
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Line 8, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , its
...emises becomes questionable. Although,its true that construction can impact the w...
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Line 8, column 185, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
... its highly regulated by the government.They ensure that the construction is not bei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 38.0 16.3942115768 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 355.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3323943662 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03822894986 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481690140845 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9465184852 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.352941176 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8823529412 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189609036656 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676602075635 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114288207319 0.0701772020484 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985434240883 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0898609663772 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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