The author contents that by providing Professor Thomas a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson Elm City University will be able to retain her in their college. This is being said as the author believes she has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary by her contribution. Although, the argument seems coherent , however, upon scrutiny, one can fathom that it is based on faulty premises and assumption.
The most glaring fallacy in this argument is that the author assumes that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college. This may not be true as there are multiple reason an individual takes into consideration when they decide where do they want to work at. There is a huge possibility that Professor Thomas is highly satisfied with the work and culture of Elm City University due to which she wants to always work there. Also there may be a possibility that Elm City University offers her a perfect work life balance due to which she wants to always work there. Hence, the author has rushed to the conclusion before completely analyzing the intent of the Professor.
Even if there is a possibility that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college, there is no evidence to support author’s contention that ; a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson will help to retain her. There might be other reason due to which she might want to change the college. It may happen she doesnot like the culture of the college or she wants to move to a different city owing to personal reasons due to which she wants to leave the university. Hence, the author assumption that a raise and a promotion will help to retain her is based on completely fallacious and incomplete reasoning.
Besides this , the author belief that her popularity is evident from the size of her classroom which is largest at the university is also questionable. Its so because her huge class size can be due to the fact that she is very strict and the students attend the classes fearing her wrath. Also, the other reason can be that her subject is one of the foundational courses due to which maximum students enroll themselves in it . Hence, this invalidates the whole argument.
Evidently, the author has not thoroughly analyzed the situation before providing the conclusion. Instead of assuming that she may leave the college the author should gather evidence whether this will happen or not. In case there is a possibility, author should carefully analyze reasons why she may leave and try to recommend the solution which caters to that reason. Therefore the author needs to reconstruct the argument, fix the flaws in his logic and provide strong reasoning in order to validate his contention. Without these changes the author’s argument that a raise and a promotion to will help retain professor Thomas will remain questionable, extremely ill constructed and thus unconvincing
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 493 350
No. of Characters: 2398 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.712 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.864 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.625 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.476 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.028 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.762 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.349 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.22 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n. Although, the argument seems coherent , however, upon scrutiny, one can fathom ...
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Line 2, column 445, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... which she wants to always work there. Also there may be a possibility that Elm Cit...
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Line 4, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and incomplete reasoning. Besides this , the author belief that her popularity i...
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Line 4, column 193, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts so because her huge class size can be due to the fact that she is very strict ...
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Line 4, column 425, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...maximum students enroll themselves in it . Hence, this invalidates the whole argum...
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Line 4, column 472, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, this invalidates the whole argument. Evidently, the author has not thoroughly...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e solution which caters to that reason. Therefore the author needs to reconstruct the arg...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...argument, fix the flaws in his logic and provide strong reasoning in order to va...
^^
Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e flaws in his logic and provide strong reasoning in order to validate his conte...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 28.8173652695 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2451.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 493.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97160243408 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7476364922 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442190669371 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 781.2 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7868748619 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.714285714 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4761904762 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255321433017 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866854498969 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932649574774 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174381844248 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104165212022 0.0628817314937 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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