"An ailing patient should have easy access to his/her doctor's record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition." - Write

The profession of the doctor is one of the most revered profession. Its so because without their expertise and skills it will be impossible for human beings to live a healthy long life. However, in today's environment when corruption has become so widespread, the profession of doctor's/ Health care professionals has also not been able to safeguard itself from it. Thus, the complexity of the situation cannot be overlooked. Stating that an ailing patient should have access to his or her doctor/s record of treating similarly afflicted patients.For it will help them determine the doctor's competency would be an oversimplification of such a complex situation. Hence, before coming to a conclusion one needs to delve into the details of this issue.

Firstly, by having access to doctor's history of treating similarly afflicted patient the patient will get knowledge about the expertise of the doctor. As a highly skilled doctor will show high probability of delivering favorable results.This will thus help the patient to determine the reliability of the treatment he/she will get. For example, if a patient is looking for a dermatologist for treating acne. Then, the best way for him/her to determine the right doctor would be by gathering information regarding the patients he/she has treated. And on the basis of this they can choose a reliable doctor.

Secondly, if such transparency exists, it will increase the confidence in the mind of patient regarding the doctor's competency.This will further ensure that the accountability of the outcome is on both the doctor and the patient. For example, a Patient who is suffering from high grade cancer chooses to undergo treatment in New York owing to its reputation of delivering best results to its patients ensures that whatever will be the outcome the responsibility will be shared equally by both the doctor and the patient.

Although there is a possibility that information patient's obtain is not 100% accurate or the records have been tempered. But this doesn't eliminates the possibility that the ease in access of such information makes the patient empowered and also ensures that doctor's are more responsible.As patient's will never choose a doctor who has not shown high probability of success in their treatments. This will thus help the patient to safeguard himself/herself from the imcompetent treatments

Thus, it will be right to say that by gaining easy access to doctor's record of treating similarly afflicted patients, the ailing patient would be better able to determine the doctor's competency to treat the medical condition.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, thus, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26201923077 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0132295438 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473557692308 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.8264576372 60.3974514979 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.8125 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34906840123 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129961375077 0.0831039109588 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13556149301 0.0758088955206 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24914460454 0.150359130593 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115612779554 0.0667264976115 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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