The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
This analytical piece argues that the number of people of Mentia who are complaining of the headache suffering will decline more. For, this conclusion the author reasons that, the increase in the salicylates ingestion of the people on Mentia reduces complains about headache. However, careful scrutiny of the argument reveals that there are several key factors that are not provided in the argument. Thus, the conclusion of the author is indefensible.
Firstly, the author states that the rise in the salicylates has been found to correlate with the decline in the number of people complaining about the headache. But, there is no mention of the about the study undertaken. It may as well be possible that the decline in the number of people complaining about headache is due to some other reason and no the very same reason that author provides. Thus, the author must provide with study about the correlation between the people complaining about the headache and the increase in the amount of the salicylates.
Secondly, the author also states that food companies have found that the salicylates can also be used as a flavor additive. This raises many queries about the salicylates that, does the people of Mentia like the taste of the salicylate as an additive flavor? There is no mention of the number of people who does and does not like it's taste. There is also another question raised that is it safe enough to take salicylates in such an amount? It might be possible that it may cause some harmful effects after increasing a certain amount.
Also, it is mentioned that the salicylates are the members of the same chemical family as aspirin, and so they are assumed to help in the decline of the people complaining about the headache. But, there is no mention that the salicylates also produces the same effects as the aspirin does. It is also possible that the effects of salicylates are different from the aspirin. Belonging to the same group of the chemical family does not mean that they have same effects on the human beings. Also, there is no mention of any study that provides support to this assertion.
To sum it, the argument of the author that the increase in the amount of salicylates reduces complains about headache is unpersuasive. To bolster it further, author must provide with clear and concrete proof, perhaps by the way of detailed analysis. Thus, to finally evaluate the argument further information about the effects of salicylate on human body must be provided.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'salicylates'' or 'salicylate's'?
Suggestion: salicylates'; salicylate's
...uthor reasons that, the increase in the salicylates ingestion of the people on Mentia reduc...
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Line 2, column 348, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...eadache is due to some other reason and no the very same reason that author provid...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ates reduces complains about headache is unpersuasive. To bolster it further, aut...
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Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...icylate on human body must be provided.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'by the way']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234782608696 0.25644967241 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.14347826087 0.15541462614 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0673913043478 0.0836205057962 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0521739130435 0.0520304965353 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0239130434783 0.0272364105082 88% => OK
Prepositions: 0.15652173913 0.125424944231 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0326086956522 0.0416121511921 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59976367036 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0195652173913 0.026700313972 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.160869565217 0.113004496875 142% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0173913043478 0.0255425247493 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0108695652174 0.0127820249294 85% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2497.0 2731.13054187 91% => OK
No of words: 422.0 446.07635468 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.91706161137 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.357819905213 0.378187486979 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.267772511848 0.287650121315 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175355450237 0.208842608468 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10663507109 0.135150697306 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59976367036 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 207.018472906 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.386255924171 0.469332199767 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.3635138464 52.1807786196 79% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0952380952 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8865054002 57.7814097925 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.904761905 141.986410481 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 46.8724892801 51.9672348444 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.93069306931 1.8405768891 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.516994184242 0.441005458295 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.190989647035 0.135418324435 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10330289509 0.0829849096947 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.65100426796 0.58762219726 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156740376675 0.147661913831 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.268068207565 0.193483328276 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125141049003 0.0970749176394 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.582405281082 0.42659136922 137% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0622461862513 0.0774707102158 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.405652929788 0.312017818177 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661656090616 0.0698173142475 95% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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