Three years ago, because of flooding at the Western Palean Wildlife Preserve, 100 lions and 100 western gazelles were moved to the East Palean Preserve, an area that is home to most of the same species that are found in the western preserve, though in larger numbers, and to the eastern gazelle, a close relative of the western gazelle. The only difference in climate is that the eastern preserve typically has slightly less rainfall. Unfortunately, after three years in the eastern preserve, the imported western gazelle population has been virtually eliminated. Since the slight reduction in rainfall cannot be the cause of the virtual elimination of western gazelle, their disappearance must have been caused by the larger number of predators in the eastern preserve.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of this analytical piece argues that the western gazelle are almost virtually eliminated. For this arument, the author reasons that incerased number of predators must caused such a decrement in the population of the western gazelle. However, on careful scrutiny it reveals that the argument provided by the author provides little credible support to the author's argument. Hence, the argument of the author is unpersuasive.
Firstly, it is assumed without the proper evidence that the virtual decrease in the number of the western gazelle is not due to rain, but because of the increment in the number of the predators. There is no statement which provides clear indication to that. Also it raises some question about the gazelle and the predators, as if, does the predators satiate themselves only on the western gazelle? If it is yes than why the 100 lions from eastern preserve were brought to the western side, instead being taken somewhere else? Also, it raises a question whether, how did these predators did not eliminate western gazelle there in western preserve? So, there are many questions to which the author must answer to.
Secondly, it is not clearly stated that whether, the area of the eastern preserve is large enough to accomodate these many animals or not. Also, as mentioned in the argument the western gazelle and the eastern gazelle are close relatives. Thus, it raises a questions how come only the western gazelle got eliminiated due to increment in the predators? Also, there are many other species in that reserve why are the only target of the predators? These questions raise some serious flaws that are present in argumrnt and answers to which would help in proper evaluation.
Thirdly, there is another assumption that the slight rainfall does not affect the health of the western gazelle. It also raises a querry that how can it be presumed? There is no mention of any study or research that might state that the reduction in the rainfall will not affect the health of the western gazelle. Thus, there should be some mentio nof the study or findings which wolud provide some support to the assumption that the less rainfall is not the cause of the elimination of the western gazelle.
To sum the argument of the author that virtual elimination in the number of the western gazelle are due to the increase in the number of the predators indefensible. To bolster it further, the author mmust provide with some more concrete evidences, perhaps with the help of the detailed research of the resons of the reduction in the number of western gazelles. Finally to better assess the argument more informaton about the western gazelle is needed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...on about the western gazelle is needed.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.212981744422 0.25644967241 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.125760649087 0.15541462614 81% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0993914807302 0.0836205057962 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0669371196755 0.0520304965353 129% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0223123732252 0.0272364105082 82% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123732251521 0.125424944231 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0243407707911 0.0416121511921 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52036898523 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0283975659229 0.026700313972 106% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.16430020284 0.113004496875 145% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0141987829615 0.0255425247493 56% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.026369168357 0.0127820249294 206% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2685.0 2731.13054187 98% => OK
No of words: 451.0 446.07635468 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.9534368071 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.392461197339 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.305986696231 0.287650121315 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.181818181818 0.208842608468 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0975609756098 0.135150697306 72% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52036898523 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 207.018472906 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419068736142 0.469332199767 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.9328694486 52.1807786196 88% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5 23.2022227129 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0943695809 57.7814097925 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.045454545 141.986410481 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.2022227129 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.636363636364 0.724660767414 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 51.0986696231 51.9672348444 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.67924528302 1.8405768891 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.53536756515 0.441005458295 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.165205313017 0.135418324435 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.127769698596 0.0829849096947 154% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.617031678362 0.58762219726 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.197475686129 0.147661913831 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.257040323417 0.193483328276 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982625489233 0.0970749176394 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.623339943799 0.42659136922 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0587183274584 0.0774707102158 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.423398164 0.312017818177 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390611724037 0.0698173142475 56% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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