Three years ago, because of flooding at the Western Palean Wildlife Preserve, 100 lions and 100 western gazelles were moved to the East Palean Preserve, an area that is home to most of the same species that are found in the western preserve, though in larger numbers, and to the eastern gazelle, a close relative of the western gazelle. The only difference in climate is that the eastern preserve typically has slightly less rainfall. Unfortunately, after three years in the eastern preserve, the imported western gazelle population has been virtually eliminated. Since the slight reduction in rainfall cannot be the cause of the virtual elimination of western gazelle, their disappearance must have been caused by the larger number of predators in the eastern preserve.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
While it may seem that disappearance of gazelle must have been causedd by larger number of predators in the eastern province but there is lot of weaknesses in the argument.
It is stated that 100 western gazelles were moved to the East Palean, but the age or health of theses gazellas is not mentioned. Maybe most of the gazellas imported were old and weak. Maybe gazellas were weak and suffering from diseases before they were transferred. Also all of the gazelles imported can be of same gender, that would made it impossible for this gazelles to mate with each other and produce children. Gazellas in the eastern province are close relative to western province, but it is not known if they can mate with each other.
Moreover, climate conditions in eastern provonce is somewhat similar to western province, rain is little less. Maybe gazellas require even more rain for survival than in western province, slight reduction in rain would have made them more vulnerable. Maybe the number of gazellas was already on decline in western province due to less rainfall, and even slight less reduction in rainfall would have made their.
Furthermore, it is written eastern province contains most of the species that are found in western province, which means it does not contain all species of western province. Maybe the species on which gazellas fed are not present in this area. Gazellas would have died because of starvation.
Additionally, it is not mentioned if the population of only gazellas is reduced or population of other large animals is also reduced. Reduction in population can be due to presence of hunters or poachers. There may be natural disaster or disease epidemic that might have reduced the populations of animals
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 289 350
No. of Characters: 1414 1500
No. of Different Words: 136 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.123 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.893 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.495 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.141 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.621 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 267, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... diseases before they were transferred. Also all of the gazelles imported can be of ...
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Line 2, column 272, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ases before they were transferred. Also all of the gazelles imported can be of same gender...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 358, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...nder, that would made it impossible for this gazelles to mate with each other and pr...
^^^^
Line 4, column 175, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ontain all species of western province. Maybe the species on which gazellas fed are n...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 289.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60009219075 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480968858131 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7932795128 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.214285714 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173662868401 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636276800422 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748653853357 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878161612649 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737635674746 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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