The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
To evaluate the argument of whether or not the West Lansburg council should allow the road to be built, one fundamental question must be answered; will the building of the road cause harm to the populations of the tufted groundhog who lives in the coastal wetlands of Wesr Lansburg? Critics of the road building have argued that the building of the road would cause the population of tufted groundhog to decline just as the population of the sea otter declined in neighboring Eastern Carpenteria when a road was built and the sactaury status repealed.
However, one must question the assumption that suggests that the decline of the popualtion of the sea otter was related to the construction of the road. Perhaps the decline of the sea otters in Eastern Carpenteria was due to an external factor such as change in climatic conditions. It could also be that the decline has been happening way before the construction of the road. If evidence points to external factors leading to the decline of the sea otters population in Eastern carpenteria, especially way before the road construction as posited by the critics of the road building project, then it would suggest that there may be little or no effect on the population of the tufted groundhog even if a road is built along the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg.
One may also question the reason why the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg became a wildlife sanctuary in the first place. If the population of the tufted groundhog had been declining even before the proposal for the road building, then it would be silly to associate subsequent decline to the road. Similarly, the population patterns before and after making the coastal wetlands a wildlife sanctuary must be investigated. Do evidence show that making the wetlands a sanctuary help stem the decline in the population of the tufted groundhog? If evidence shows that population decline was still ongoing even after the declaration of the wetland as as a wildlife sanctuary, then there are other external factors that are actually in effect and that the idea of building a road may not be detrimental as it is suggested.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1753 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.856 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.718 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.503 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.641 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.201 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
To evaluate the argument of whether or not the West Lansburg council should allow ...
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Line 1, column 1003, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
...ctors leading to the decline of the sea otters population in Eastern carpenteria, espe...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 1960, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: as
...en after the declaration of the wetland as as a wildlife sanctuary, then there are ot...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, then, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90858725762 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75800691792 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.393351800554 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.9024264466 57.8364921388 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.090909091 119.503703932 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8181818182 23.324526521 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72727272727 5.70786347227 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171349191556 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836760065217 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699668106867 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171349191556 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.3799401198 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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