This letter’s author recommends charging fees for public access to Tria’s beaches as an
effective means of raising funds for the purpose of saving Tria’s tourist industry. The author
reasons that beaches-access fees would reduce the number of beachgoers while providing
revenue for replenishing beach sand needed to protect nearby buildings, thereby enhancing
the area’s attractiveness to tourists. To support the argument, the author points out that beach
sand was replenishing on the nearby island of Batia, thereby reducing the risk of storm
damage to buildings there. I find the argument unconvincing for several reasons.
First of all, the author makes certain dubious assumptions about the impact of beach access
fees. On the one hand, the author ignores the possibility that charging fees might deter so
many tourists that Tria would be worse off overall. On the other hand, perhaps the vast
majority of Tria’s tourists and residents alike would happily pay for beach access, in which
case Tria’s beaches would continue t be no less crowded than they are now. Under either
scenario, adopting the author’s proposal might harm, rather than benefit, Tria’s tourist
industry in the long run.
Secondly, the mere fact that on nearby Batia replenishing beach sand has served to protect
shoreline buildings is scant evidence that Tria would achieve its goals by following Batia’s
example. Perhaps the same course of action would be ineffective on Tria due to geological
differences between the two islands. Or perhaps Batia is in a far better position than Tria
financially to replenish its sand on a continual basis. In short, lacking evidence that conditions
on the two islands are relevantly similar, the author cannot convince me on the basis of
Batia’s experience that the proposed course of action would be effective on attaining Tria’s
goals.
Thirdly, even if replenishing Tria’s beach sand is financially feasible and would protect
nearby buildings, the author provides no evidence that Tria’s tourist industry would be saved
thereby. Perhaps Tria’s tourist appeal has little to do with the beach and nearby buildings; for
that matter, perhaps Tria’s tourist appeal would be greater with fewer buildings along the
coast. Since the author provide no firm evidence that replenishing sand and protecting nearby
buildings would be more beneficial to Tria’s tourist industry than allowing nature to take its
course, I do not find the author’s argument the least bit compelling.
In sum, the argument is unconvincing as it sands. To strengthen it, the author must show that
charging beach-access fees would reduce the number of beachgoers, but not to the extent of
undermining the goal of raising sufficient funds to maintain an attractive coastal area. The
author must also provide better evidence that replenishing sand would indeed protect nearby
buildings, and that the net result would be the enhancement of Tria’s tourist industry.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 467 350
No. of Characters: 2430 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.649 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.203 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.602 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.953 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...blic access to Tria's beaches as an effective means of raising funds for the...
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...Tria's tourist industry. The author reasons that beaches-access fees would r...
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...the number of beachgoers while providing revenue for replenishing beach sand need...
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...tect nearby buildings, thereby enhancing the area's attractiveness to touris...
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...gument, the author points out that beach sand was replenishing on the nearby isla...
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...atia, thereby reducing the risk of storm damage to buildings there. I find the ar...
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...mptions about the impact of beach access fees. On the one hand, the author ignore...
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...bility that charging fees might deter so many tourists that Tria would be worse o...
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...all. On the other hand, perhaps the vast majority of Tria's tourists and res...
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...d happily pay for beach access, in which case Tria's beaches would continue ...
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...rather than benefit, Tria's tourist industry in the long run. Secondly, ...
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...nishing beach sand has served to protect shoreline buildings is scant evidence th...
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...ieve its goals by following Batia's example. Perhaps the same course of acti...
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...be ineffective on Tria due to geological differences between the two islands. Or ...
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...ia is in a far better position than Tria financially to replenish its sand on a c...
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...uthor cannot convince me on the basis of Batia's experience that the propose...
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...ld be effective on attaining Tria's goals. Thirdly, even if replenishing...
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...s financially feasible and would protect nearby buildings, the author provides no...
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...a's tourist industry would be saved thereby. Perhaps Tria's tourist app...
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...strengthen it, the author must show that charging beach-access fees would reduce ...
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... of beachgoers, but not to the extent of undermining the goal of raising sufficie...
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...maintain an attractive coastal area. The author must also provide better evidence...
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...nishing sand would indeed protect nearby buildings, and that the net result would...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, in short, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64025695931 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89598233439 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48608137045 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3512798487 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.333333333 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9444444444 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 33.0 5.15768463074 640% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171500797356 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702332504885 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387827842291 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564835668546 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373661249655 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.3799401198 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.5979740519 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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