The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school:
Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The given argument by the parents of a private school student to the principal of that school is faulty due to the various reasons. Primarily, the students parent make assumption that since yesterday their son and some of his friends don't like the lunch options, so all the students of that school also don't like the lunch options at that school. Other reason for the faulty argument is that their parents assume that since some student don't like lunch options so they will bring less healthy food from home, since the management has been changed from the last year and no complain was their about the lunch option it might be case that lunch options be changed a week ago which is not much appreciated by students, but they do like the previous options.
Firstly, the argument is based on the wrong assumption that since their son and his friends don't like the food options of the school, so most of the students at the school don't like the school lunch options. Here no information is provided about the number of students that came up with the complain to hi parents house. There can be his 2 friends or 20 friends, but since complete stats are not provided we can not make any assumption from this. The other issue with this argument is that the complain from some students is being made generalized on the whole school students. Whereas, their can be a case where only some children don't like lunch plan but about 90% of the school students liked it and were in favor of that lunch options. It would be appropriate if the reason of why the lunch option was dislike be provided and number of students who bring up the complain was provided that would make the argument much strong.
Secondly, a wrong implication is being made in the argument provided by student parent that since some students don't like the lunch option, they will start bringing the unhealthy food from home creating the issue. This is a wring argument as no supporting point or previous supporting behavior of student is not provide. Student may not like lunch option but it not the case that they will start bringing unhealthy food instead of buying from cafeteria. It would be a strong argument if some previous student activities is being highlighted with this point where a same case occur and student does this in response.
Lastly, the student parent makes a wrong implication here, where they said that if Swift is not replaced by another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for the students. Here no supporting point is being provided if why it will happen. The only supporting point on this implication is based on another faulty assumption that student will bring unhealthy food to the school. Making this assumption a faulty one. Since this vendor servers low-calorie and low-fat food to students so it must be healthy for the students and it gives no threat to the students health. While previous assumption was made on faulty argument, this causes this implication to be wrong also because no supporting fact is being provided in the letter.
These were the primary reasons of why the author arguments were not right. Since the author make lots of assumptions and generalization based o the limited information provided and does not provide facts and figures on his arguments, makes the argument very weak. If enough information and facts are provided this argument would be much stronger.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 593 350
No. of Characters: 2763 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.935 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.659 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.395 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.955 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.432 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...erday their son and some of his friends dont like the lunch options, so all the stud...
^^^^
Line 1, column 304, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...so all the students of that school also dont like the lunch options at that school. ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 438, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... parents assume that since some student dont like lunch options so they will bring l...
^^^^
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...on that since their son and his friends dont like the food options of the school, so...
^^^^
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
..., so most of the students at the school dont like the school lunch options. Here no ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...he number of students that came up with the complain to hi parents house. There can be his 2...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... other issue with this argument is that the complain from some students is being made genera...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 633, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... can be a case where only some children dont like lunch plan but about 90% of the sc...
^^^^
Line 3, column 863, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ded and number of students who bring up the complain was provided that would make the argume...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...student parent that since some students dont like the lunch option, they will start ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...s supporting behavior of student is not provide. Student may not like lunch option but ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 562, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... students and it gives no threat to the students health. While previous assumption was m...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.6327345309 209% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2817.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 586.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80716723549 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92010537223 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42660255942 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.346416382253 0.468620217663 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 823.5 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.0662695918 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.045454545 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183722407522 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727593126225 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630531287898 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110690379022 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558693688084 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.32208582834 84% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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