Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In today's era where world has become a global village and every country is in race of becoming superior and stronger then others in terms of power and intellectual, there comes a biggest challenge for a government to decide whether they should invest similar amount in arts and education as they had invested in military. However, military is state security is the biggest issue and every government should invest highly in their military, arts and education is far most the fundamental of all. No society or country can prosper without advancing themselves in arts.
For a nation to advance government should invest the same huge amount in arts as they invest in their military. South Korea is one of the best example where the government have invested in arts and education much more than military and today they are producing scientist musicians, artist in every fields. In order for a nation to strive and to be stronger the youth of the country should should be utilized in best way possible. Indulging youth only towards the military will only make a country strong to fight but the main pillars of the country will get weaken from inside and hence the country will fall as they haven't produced good people who can work for society in different ways. Youth shouldn't be inclined towards fighting and military, however they should be indulge in new arts or education. Where they can learn to help country without being part of the military.
Education is the fundamental right of all human beings, and any country that is not investing similar amount of money in the arts and education sector is not providing their fundamental rights fully. A country can not and had never prosper in the world without making its roots, that is education, stronger then military. Educated nation can do much more for a country then a country with military and no strong pillar of education and arts. Arts give a message of peace and solution to everyone, so a country that is investing a lot towards arts military is less dangerous for the world then a country that is only investing in the military. North Korea and South Korea is perfect example for this issue. Where North Korea has only invested in military and today they are seen as threat towards the world and when we see the world we don't see any North Korean youth taking part in advancement of the world Whereas south korea has invested only in education and not in military they have best artist but weak security and they need external help to fight evil.
In some cases it is very important to have strong military and to invest more in military then in arts. That is in times of war military had to be stronger or when country have external or internal threats. In these cases government had to invest in military to make country stronger. Security is the biggest issue in these times and people should understand that military is also important part of the country which need to be advance and stronger to stop evil from destroying the country.
Military and arts are both the most important factor for a government and government should invest in them equally. A country can never be strong if it has weak education and strong military and vice versa. Both the elements have utmost importance in themselves and both should be heavily invested.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'stronger than'?
Suggestion: stronger than
...try is in race of becoming superior and stronger then others in terms of power and intellectu...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... race of becoming superior and stronger then others in terms of power and intellectu...
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Suggestion: the
... of power and intellectual, there comes a biggest challenge for a government to d...
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Suggestion: should
...to be stronger the youth of the country should should be utilized in best way possible. Indul...
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Suggestion: in the best
...f the country should should be utilized in best way possible. Indulging youth only towa...
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...rk for society in different ways. Youth shouldnt be inclined towards fighting and milita...
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Message: Did you mean 'indulged'?
Suggestion: indulged
...ng and military, however they should be indulge in new arts or education. Where they ca...
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Suggestion: prospered
... fully. A country can not and had never prosper in the world without making its roots,...
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Suggestion:
...d had never prosper in the world without making its roots, that is education, str...
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Message: Did you mean 'stronger than'?
Suggestion: stronger than
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
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Suggestion: have the best
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... external or internal threats. In these cases government had to invest in military to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, then, whereas, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 14.8657303371 242% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2738.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 573.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77835951134 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42273711585 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.361256544503 0.4932671777 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 864.9 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.6988716355 60.3974514979 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.454545455 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0454545455 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86363636364 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161251482887 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646251542135 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527139889487 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107694059341 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354784462136 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.