The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants. "Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, we predict that Happy Pancake House will be able to increase profits dramatically if we extend this cost-saving change to all our restaurants in the southeast and northeast as well." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In the given memorandum it is stated that if the restaurants in the southeast and northeast were able to change the butter with the margarine the profit of the restaurants can be enhanced by adopting these cost-saving changes. The business manager has come to this conclusion based on the given shreds of evidence that margarine plays a pivotal role in the cost-saving strategy. However, the business manager might be correct but there are several questions to be answered to call it a perfect assertion and the unwarranted assumptions put forward by the businessman need to be meticulously examined.
First of all, the businessman is concerned that the profit can be enhanced in the southeast and as well as in the northeast by adopting the same strategy that has been used in the southwestern United States. On the contrary, the people of the southeast and northeast may not have the similar taste as the people of the southwestern. The people may be loath towards the margarine if this scenario might happen the various restaurants may face a notorious situation that thwarts the business that has been prevailing for a long time in the southeast and as well as northeast. If either of the scenarios presented has merit then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is weakened.
Secondly, from the given argument it has been presumed that some people in people in the southeast, as well as the northeast, cannot differentiate butter from margarine. However, this may not be the case the people of the southeast and as well as the northeast may easily differentiate the butter from margarine and they may rail against the restaurant’s managers of the pancakes and there may stem the sense of the disappointment among the people more people may rail about the quality of the pancakes provided by the restaurants.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed predicated on the flawed assumptions. If the author is able to answer the questions raised above and offer more evidence ( in the form of a systematic research study ) then it is possible to strengthen.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1716 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.869 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.379 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.42 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.494 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 574, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the southeast and as well as northeast. If either of the scenarios presented has m...
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Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'people in'.
Suggestion: people in
...argument it has been presumed that some people in people in the southeast, as well as the northeast...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ons raised above and offer more evidence in the form of a systematic research stu...
^^
Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the form of a systematic research study then it is possible to strengthen.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98571428571 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95901390083 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434285714286 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.1521475373 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.636363636 119.503703932 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8181818182 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9090909091 5.70786347227 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174217681005 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634687361418 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477699208249 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961115911908 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491274888971 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.3799401198 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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