The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The restaurant owner has made a trivial change in their recipe, i.e. they have replaced the use of butter with margarine. Not many customers complain about this change so the restaurant manager thinks that the customers are not able to distinguish between butter and margarine or they are least interested with either ingredient.However this might not be the possible explanation for the customers reaction and I propose the following explanations.
Butter or margarine might look different but they might have a similar taste.So whenever a customer asks for butter, the restaurant might be giving margarine in such a way that the customer might not know whether it is butter or margarine since they taste similar and the customer thus must be relishing the taste without actually knowing the real ingredient. This might as well happen if the restaurant has an expertise in garnishing the dish so well as to deceive the customers.
Another explanation could be the customers might have come to the restaurant for a important meeting with some officials and thus they are unaware about the dish they are eating. They must be so engrossed in their meeting that they pay less heed to what they are eating and hence they cannot make out the difference between butter and margarine.
The restaurant might be receiving customers other than their own native. Butter and margarine might have been used frequently in their respective native and thus they practically do not care whether they are being served butter or margarine. They must be familiar with both the ingredients and thus are little affected by the abrupt change the restaurant went into.
From the above explanations it could be evident why the customers had little impact of the restaurants change. Furthermore the explanations provided by the author could not clearly explain the reason why customers are not affected by the change and are clearly vague explanations.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1593 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.025 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.629 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.822 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.427 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.704 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The restaurant owner has made a trivial ...
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Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...least interested with either ingredient.However this might not be the possible explanat...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...least interested with either ingredient.However this might not be the possible explanat...
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Line 1, column 391, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...not be the possible explanation for the customers reaction and I propose the following ex...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...I propose the following explanations. Butter or margarine might look different...
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Suggestion: So
...ent but they might have a similar taste.So whenever a customer asks for butter, th...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... so well as to deceive the customers. Another explanation could be the custome...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s might have come to the restaurant for a important meeting with some officials a...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erence between butter and margarine. The restaurant might be receiving custom...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rupt change the restaurant went into. From the above explanations it could be ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ittle impact of the restaurants change. Furthermore the explanations provided by the author...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, so, thus, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15238095238 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7714776628 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469841269841 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.4377159443 57.8364921388 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.545454545 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6363636364 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103130027978 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514315838748 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356089058728 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0695976117247 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323995935301 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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