The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a listener-supported public radio station.
"For the past year, as part of an effort to broaden our supporter base, our Folk on the Air program has allocated less time to traditional American folk music and more time to Latino music and world music. In recent months, many long-term supporters of our station have written to complain about what they describe as the un-American bias of the program. In addition, the local newspaper has published a recent editorial critical to our shift in programming. Therefore, in order to forestall any further adverse publicity for the station and to avoid the loss of additional listener-supporters, we should discontinue our current emphasis on Latino and world music and restore the time devoted to traditional American folk music to its former level."
Respond by writing an essay in which you discuss the specific evidence you would need to judge the validity of the argument and explain how this evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the recent memorandum from the business manager of a radio station , he stated to discontinue the emphasis given to the Latino music in order to avoid the criticism by the supporters. However, he didn't mentioned explicitly about the type and number of criticism and also made many groundless assumptions which are not credible. Similarly, the premise is incomplete to come to such conclusion.
The manager claimed to discontinue the emphasis but didn't considered any facts about the effect on broadening supporters which was the primary reason for the focusing on Latino music. In addition he didn't mentioned clearly about the no. of complains that were against the program, and also didn't considered the view of the supporters who Latino music. So, further analysis is needed before reaching the decision.
Similarly, he mentioned that the local newspaper's view about the program shifting; But didn't mentioned whether there are other newspapers who may love the program shift. Therefore, further survey is required before any implementation of the new program shifting.
Moreover, the un-American biased is stated in the memorandum, but isn't explained how it is un-American. It needs to be made clear prior to the further action.
In sum, the manager's statement regarding the program shifting to previous type cannot be accepted. The assumptions are groundless and the research is incomplete. So, an exhaustive study is required prior to reaching conclusion.
Comments
e-rater score report
No. of Words: 236 350
Minimum 250 words wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 236 350
No. of Characters: 1204 1500
No. of Different Words: 121 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.919 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.102 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.877 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 92 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.61 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.34 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the business manager of a radio station , he stated to discontinue the emphasis g...
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Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...riticism by the supporters. However, he didnt mentioned explicitly about the type and...
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Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...claimed to discontinue the emphasis but didnt considered any facts about the effect o...
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Line 2, column 187, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...on for the focusing on Latino music. In addition he didnt mentioned clearly about the no...
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Line 2, column 199, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ocusing on Latino music. In addition he didnt mentioned clearly about the no. of comp...
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Line 2, column 290, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...that were against the program, and also didnt considered the view of the supporters w...
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Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...rs view about the program shifting; But didnt mentioned whether there are other newsp...
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Line 4, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... biased is stated in the memorandum, but isnt explained how it is un-American. It...
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Line 4, column 68, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...iased is stated in the memorandum, but isnt explained how it is un-American. It nee...
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Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
...ior to the further action. In sum, the managers statement regarding the program shiftin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, similarly, so, therefore, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1236.0 2260.96107784 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 230.0 441.139720559 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37391304348 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91431066447 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 204.123752495 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539130434783 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 705.55239521 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.0629192395 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2857142857 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125291815648 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380409581803 0.0743258471296 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042490151937 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0655014548977 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185883711603 0.0628817314937 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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